What am I to do (straight from the heart)
 

this is a true story:

i broke up with my girl cos we had sum problems, (problems)
maybe i did it quick cos i thought i cud solve em, (solve em)
then i got with this other chick
...........................................now we have a problem,
is it going anywhere??..........i ask my self,
all nite I blast my self, ponderin my self, (my self)
wonderin what i should do i need some help, (some help)
should i go to the hospital and check in myslef,
its not jus a matter of love, its a matter of health,
cos im dyin inside, tryin to ride, (to ride)
with 1, 2 many girls,im livin a lie,
drowned in the tears that i made cry, (made cry)
hurt deep, the insides i made bleed, (made bleed)
all bcoz of my creed...............
i belive , do we have a shot again,
or baby girl should we jus remain freinds,
im sleepin in it cos i made my own bed, (own)
hurt my best freind, our love wont end (end)

what am i to do when i see you again
what am i to do when i hear u again
what am i to do when ure on top of me again
cos i see that happening in my head
what am i to do if we fall in love again
what am i to do when ure huggin me, again
what am i to do when ure rubbin me, again
what am i to do if we fall in love again,

this other chick im wit, makes me feel big,
but we dnt have a relationship tht we cud live wit
sorry girl but runnin out of things to give,
for a minute u were the light that always lit
the skies hoverin above my eyes,
but i realise we hve no....future to arise,
sharon my love aint lost for you, (rpt line)
sharon my trus aint lost for you, (rpt line)
but we lost the spark tht we had from the start, (start)
its blown the light we had from the dark, (dark)
we were lilke dogs, but now its jus a meaningless bark, (bark)
u were like my valentine, but now its jus a meaingless heart (heart)
our love i cherish, our hugs i cherish,
but we have nothin my heart seems so damaged, (so damaged)
our future so bleek, but what did I see
it was the commitment of marriage i believe (comitment of marriage i believe)

this is an audio btw so the structure is weird

upppppppp//....................

hey i want to make this over with you...im feeling ya and just got through the same thing,....man holla back
i give this an 8/10

Iite def dawg pm me and well get it down

well im impressed..thats some deep ish...i liked the way it was put togeather...8.10

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Your structure...was quite off, flow was still created, vocab was off the hook, ur multis were iffy...wasnt feelin them....ur emotion was tight...felt you had extremely good imagery....keep this shit up man.......just fix up ya structure ull be cool 7.5/10....rtf on a battle or summin