! Aisle 5 vs Token !
Verse's due Jan. 7 Votes Due Jan. 10 [insert bullshit here] .. don't no show or i'll kill you .. topic Bumper Stickers |
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Easy to please, fascinated by anything that catches my eye
I grabbed my keys, and then headed over to shop at Best Buy Cuz it was Christmas time and I had yet to spend a dime And I know what kinda image it implies, but thats no matter Because it's all behind, so I started the car on a full bladder The road seemed like a potential disaster, so I drove even faster To avoid and accident and shit. . but finally I calmed down a bit But traffic got even worse, I held my head in my hand sighing A semi swerved into my lane w/ a sticker asking "Hows my driving?" My allergies and headache were arriving, call it tough luck I felt my hands shaking, so I lit a ciggarette and puffed I felt like I had enough, but I can't let the shit get to my head Then I noticed this dope Mustang. . to get a good look I sped And then, I noticed it's bumper sticker with very small writing So I got up beside it, the petite font seemed warm n' inviting Me and my conciense began fighting, fuck the laws I was breakin A foot behind the car, I struggled to read and began shaking Finally! I made out the text - "If you can read this you're tailgating" It was too late, I quickly looked above at the lights overhead They went from green..... to orange, but I sped as it hit red Car got demolished, maybe my price for speeding better yet I thank God for watchin over me, and I'm glad I wasn't dead I still remember. . the bumper sticker on the car before fainting And it read. . "Have a very special holiday season. . and drive safely!" Key'd 24 lines at midnite, dope! |
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Doper! Exit: Funny Mode Enter: Deep Mode *clears throat* One early morning.. Rushing to get to work before I was late There was just one car stoppin me with a foreign license plate I was fucked.. stuck behind him for nearly an hour Wierd thing is.. .. Everytime I looked near his tag I felt power I started getting shaky.. So I just Tried to ignore this feeling Suddenly I saw in my head.. an image of myself kneeling And praying.. But I could not make out what I was saying My senses were numb, Like my brain and body were rough playing I felt like my gut was decaying.. I didn't know what to do So through the traffic I flew.. Till suddenly this feeling grew My heart started racing, My knees were weak and my face was sweating I lost thought of where I was heading.. I barely remembered forgetting Without thought I turn my head across the street where I had just came Sparked flames and a desperate man trying to keep his car maintained My head is spinning.. All dizzy breathing heavily.. Barely swallowing All I see is sirens, debris, and the car that I had been following I reach for my cell phone to report this accident to the police But as I dialed for some reason all my symptoms seemed to decrease I hung up the phone, slowly walked torwards the horrific scene Looked down at the back and could barely see through the smoke and the steam And I read "If it's not death.. Your problem can be solved.." My lips quivered My tears formed a river ..It's a shame I had to learn my lesson from a bumper sticker |
*Aisle = a slut*
I conclude.. That token is a dope writer, and he got mad potential for writing good topicals = ) But Aisle , had the winning hand here, ..with just the better internals, ..and wordplay with a real nice flow to it, .. Token props to u , = ) i really enjoyed ur piece, ..& i luv u ..but he took u on this one..olso props to aisle, cuz i was gettin into ur story aswell..sigaret line was real dope.. Enjoyed both, but felled aisle's more,..= ) Keep it up ya'll Westsiddddddde! Vote = Aisle.. |
Didnt think that , ..was a nice story, & i was gettin in to it..
But im stoned, so i like siggie smoke Token i love u.. Up^ |
yo...im knew to this site...were do i go to battle...
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lol... Front Lines. Post a callout in Bitch Slapped.
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It came down to personal preference i guess .. but i was feeling Token's more .. just came off deeeper as i read it .. got into the topic well .. grasped it slightly better .. was a decent piece .. short but simple from both sides .. but i felt Token took it. He came off the better of the two in more area's .. got it overall i felt.
Vote: Token |
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Interesting, huge contrast in the pieces...
But i prefered Aisles, it was a good piece and kept me reading, seemed exactly like a real life scenario, like a movie or someshit. You know when your ead something and you get a little film that starts moving in your head? yea thats what i ahd with Aisles. Tokens just seemed....... hard to explain as Cam said it comes down to personal taste wether you like funny or deep. I prefered funny today, and thats why my vote goes to Aisle good pieces guys, stay up =) |
vote - aisle five
his made a little bit more sense...i still dont understand how anyone was shaking from a bumper sticker, or feelings 'power', but both of you need to work on multi's in your verses. it was a close one. keep writing peace. |
^ Think spiritual.
*shakes head* I'm going to ask everyone else to read my verse twice.. Seeing as you obviously don't get it the first time. :) Good verse Aisle. |
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He was shaking because he was so close to the car, not because it was holy or some shit. Don't think too hard man. :thumbup: |
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