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Awkwordz Vs. BigChase
.::Rules::. 20 Line Minimum 30 Line Maximum No Crew No Hate No D/R Checks Due By 8-20-04 Spits Due By 8-22-04 Votes Due By 8-25-04 Topic: Pride Good Luck To Both! ~R~ |
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is he no-showing oh well.......yay i guess..............
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check check check check...
forgot i signed up for this shit lol... n Restricted- fix my name in the title man |
ima watch htis........isnt Akwaordz Lk's man?????
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......... name's akwordz, and yes.... call ya momma
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Pride the ultimate form of love, a great sense of belief
displayed when out olypmpians proudly wore victories wreath or when a young male child is adored after his birth joyful cries of love surround his fragile existence, inherit the earth .:Pride to represent:. As I kneel my vision focuses on the most chrished prize, gold Before the gunshot time completely slows and nerves take hold As my moment nears my muscles twitches with anticipation One moment to start the run for glorification of my nation As the shot rang my ears, my muscles keyed for this exact event My vision narrowed to just the track, my opponents irrelevent My heart pounded, harder than ever, my breaths sharp and quick The end of the track nearing, and competition getting thick Only the track, my body, and air fuel me to continue my quest THe deed done, my lifes accomplishment, world records I have left The ceromony in which they play the most beautiful song where my heart resides I can only cry with joy as I accpet gold, the nations pride .:Pride to Defend:. As we move towards un-know enemy quarters, we silently wait Our lives in the hands of leaders, enemies, and unshure fate A simple mistake and were spotted a exchange of fire ensued bullets sprayed the sand, confusion created, unshure of what to do the next day unshure, probability of survival is close to zero but no matter what Ill never stop fighting as Americas Hero ima be gone till sunday ill vote when im back..... |
yeah... the bars look stretched i guess, but i didn't spend any time worring about structure... this is just how it turned out in notepad...
Pride's when you stay in the fight not wantin'a save your own life By how you were raised & what ya know is right, they can tell humble while you're humming show tunes, to show you, you're moving up, be proud- no one likes a show-boat, stay in your zone without remaining local, concentrate, and maybe some day we'll know you, Stay on track, not just talkin bout laying vocals, Change the whole world without changing yourself, Money makes your world go 'round, but not everywhere accepts cash, Resent-mant from what were then-friends'll make things hopeless for when you do the hard work, n got stuff to show for it, Shit's tough, and you're supposed to ignore it, stuffed upto your throat holdin in emotions, going through the motions, won-dring how close you are to ex-ploding, is it too much to hold in, or just what you got going for you, seems like no one 'round heres pulling for you, no girls or nothings falling for you or calling for you, so you packed up your pride & swallowed it whole, Decided to follow the mold, tried it until,your upscale lifestyle blinded you pride, ya feel it's unreal- up 'til your blood spilled, never was one to know how being jeal-ous feels, just stayed on the grind, feelin like rusty wheels, while i ride in the hurst,eyes were closed as i learned my survival was cursed, read my bible at first - took my time and it worked, for the first time my pride didn't hurt, still it got worse as i desired and flirted with the idea of getting sent to the fire n burning, Luring my burdens out, but they're getting hid further in, i was sure, seeing what they do to me, heaven wouldn't let me in when the doorbell rings Now i dont know what your personal hell brings, Mine's selling pride & opinons for 2 cents - spare change, to pay off this overwhelming debt to society cuz I wont change….. I don’t care what they say… Go ahead and lose me in the shuffle, I’m elusive and I want to be viewed useless, just to taunt you, fool you, then embark on my travels through the underworld… Maybe they'll have somethin'a be proud of while looking down from above |
decent battle heres my breakdown
a k w o r d z~pretty good drop it took me a min 2 figure out the flow becuz ur structure was weird, nice vocab and i was feelin how you wrote this topic bigchase~Real nice drop your verse had a real nice flow to it and your vocab was pretty good, the structure of it was good 2 i like how u put 2 different stories and twisted them into one In my opinion this was a real close battle but in the end... v/bigchase |
Im Gonna Have To Say Chase...
Just Had A Better Overall Handle On His Verse... Topic, Flow, Everything... Awk, I See You Going Big Soon... But You Just Have To Work On Easily Improvable Skills... I'll Look Forward To See What Becomes Of You In The Future... But Ya... Vote: Big Chase Please Return The Favor And Vote On My Battle Against Babylon... .One. |
my bad for entering a tourny without having a name for myself on this site... straight up, Chase's verse was weak, like... wow, he made up some bullshit about winning the olympics and made the end syllable in each line rhyme, congrats. if he was to post that shit up on another site, he would get laughed off... but i guess yall like shit like that, no skill, just a story... judging on structure, not content...
real good tourny huh... delete this if you think I'm trying to sway |
Akwordz - Your Verse's Structure Wasn't There At All But I Caught On To The Scheme Once I Looked Over It Again. Not Too Much Of A Vocab But Your Point Gets Across. Nice Put Of Emotion and Message That Was Sent Threw. Needs For Improvement but Just Do Ya Thang. BigChase - The Direction You Took Was Cool Cause Of The Olympics That Are Going On Right Now...So In My Eyes You Based Your Ish Off That. Your Structure Wasn't Too Nice...Emotion and Getting The Point Across Wasn't As Nice As Awkords In My Eyes. But Nice Drop.....Just Elevate Man. Vote - AkwordZ ~R~ |
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damn someones a sore loser...fix ya structure its all ova the place man...but good dorp....t least im a good psort..... Plus I did my verse before track happened and we won gold at 100m so basicaly I predicted.... :thumbup: |
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i wrote my verse in 20 minutes... so i wasn't worryed about structure as much as content...i never worry about structure as much as content.... looks like you worryed too much about structure cuz your content was wack. you honestly cant say that you had a better verse, you're just getting votes cuz you're one of the "favorites". and I'm not hating either, real shit. anyway... uppin. |
I do lal my verse in 10 minutes but thats your opinion different people like different stuff and Im not the fav...........theres no d/r here
im not a dumbass like you and get pissed over a vote....calm down kid.... |
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