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Freestyle #2( breaking out)
.:Ill IntentionZ:. PRODUCTIONS
BREAKING OUT It wasn’t my intension to kill you, but you stood in my way, Try to block everything, that I loved, dreams you’ve fade You came at me with furious anger, so really I had to defend Myself, plus break 4 strong walls that you’ve kept me trapped in Finally I can repent myself from this darkness, that you call hell You was so abusive, so stipulate, you had me in a blind love spell When daytime arrives your evil force of nature inside of you don’t show It only comes out at night , with an help of liquor, then the evil blows Comes out with dirty swinging fist to my heads, words that are so obscured Every lil.nasty verbs, have me groaning and moaning my stomach, its hurts I wish the neighbors can call the police, “there’s been an brutal disturb” So I saw my chance, saw the gun, clocked it, popped it, and there you go down Onto the ground, not breathing, not an scream, no my tears didn’t come out I wasn’t going to give this man an tense of my sorrow to him, it was over Beatings, profanity words, it was all gone, for the first time I saw the sun glow TRUE STORY DOWN HERE IN MY TOWN :thumbup: |
HOT TOPICAL
8.0/10 the structure good vocabs good just some of the imagination i didnt understand |
O alright thanks for the feedback fam........uppin for more
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chea fam...that was a tight freestyle...9/10...flow was good, a little choppy here and there, but its a freestyle drop so it wont be perfect...you had good vocab use...keep them comming mayne...hot shit...~1~
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thanks for the feedback fam...uppin for more feedbacks
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Nice topical...yeah that's the way you do it...
Keep up the good work! :thumbup: |
Chea Thanks Fam..............uppin For More Feedbacks Holla At Cha Boi
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Uppin Uppin For More Feedbacks......upppin .........
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i thought was aiight u coulda done better, not so stretched out lines in some spots, but other than that this was nice and you stayed on topic.
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Chea thanks for the feedback fam.......uppin for some more feedbacks holla
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good stucture and goof flow....thats what you need also good multis there...weerd..
this was good...8/10 check my open mics... |
O Aight I'll Get At Them Open Mics Now....thanks For The Feedback Fam
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Chea Uppin For More Feedbacks Holla Uppin.............chea
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