VanIllabymidnite vs. KLO!
Okay, 10-12 lines, no bullshit, and let's make it blind drop, sound good?
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Okay, Let's drop by 12 eastern.
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Shit, sorry, I was trying to say 12 pacific time, that's like 3 eastern time..
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I just put this together while I was tryin to figure out what was wrong, hope you drop soon..Sorry for all the mix up..
KLO! take that L out and that's how it'll go.. Just one punch from me and I'll get a nice KO.. I don't know this kid, but I know he's new.. Easly explained, from day one it was threw.. Tryed to make your flows neon to make them glow.. Made a damn of words thats made to stem a flow.. Lookin at you like a semi auto-matic weapon, not spittin fast.. Come threw like speed racer, I see you just sittin gettin past.. Your like a woman that wipes wrong, your clit stinks bad.. Next thing you know your fans are gone, like pinks fad.. You tryin to spit like a gun fight at the OK Coralle.. The clock hits high noon, that's the end of your profile.. |
It's the K to the L to the O to the exclamation point.
My punctuation gets applause while your sentences dissapoint. You could write a whole novel and only get bad reviews while what I wrote on my shopping list could make the evening news. Don't fuck with me, I'm like a dog that's been abused; I'll piss all over your house, your clothing, and your CDs too. If my rhymes are Jesus Christ, then yours are Brittney Spears; They'll devote whole days to me while you'll be dated in years. Even if you went back in time and killed me before I dropped this verse I'd still murder your ass 'cause your battling skills are the worst. |
Sorry it took me so long. Damn, nice verse. Good luck.
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You too, yeah, I had problems with my comp. Anyway, nice verse, I guess mine was okay for a first battle.
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I think KLO took this one, i just thought he flowed better and had nice punches, I really like the line about the shopping list
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Uppit #2 Come on people vote, I'd vote on others if I had the posts....
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Uppit #3 vote damn you..............................................
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Uppit #4 all I'm askin is for people to vote, I'd vote on others battles if I had 100 posts but I don't, so vote on my battle, and when I do have 100 posts I'll start voting on yours...................
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Uppit #5 People need to vote on this now, this is the last up I can do, so for the love of god vote on this newbies need to get votes also....................................
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I have to give this on to VanIlla for verser structure and delivery. KLO some of the shit you said could have been tight if you worked on the delivery.
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KLO! take that L out and that's how it'll go..
Just one punch from me and I'll get a nice KO.. ^opened it decent, with an ok personal I don't know this kid, but I know he's new.. Easly explained, from day one it was threw.. ^thought this could have hit harder, quite basic Tryed to make your flows neon to make them glow.. Made a damn of words thats made to stem a flow.. ^ok W/P, but didnt hit too hard Lookin at you like a semi auto-matic weapon, not spittin fast.. Come threw like speed racer, I see you just sittin gettin past.. ^OK W/P again,, but ya need to work on punching Your like a woman that wipes wrong, your clit stinks bad.. Next thing you know your fans are gone, like pinks fad.. ^quite wit'y... decent wordplay, n hit ok.... but for a closer wasnt that strong..... It's the K to the L to the O to the exclamation point. My punctuation gets applause while your sentences dissapoint. ^nice flow... hit ok... but openers need to be better You could write a whole novel and only get bad reviews while what I wrote on my shopping list could make the evening news. ^dont like self props in battle... and it didnt hit Don't fuck with me, I'm like a dog that's been abused; I'll piss all over your house, your clothing, and your CDs too. ^funny... but weak for a dis If my rhymes are Jesus Christ, then yours are Brittney Spears; They'll devote whole days to me while you'll be dated in years. ^again quite wit'y, but didnt rhyme very well Even if you went back in time and killed me before I dropped this verse I'd still murder your ass 'cause your battling skills are the worst. ^weak punch... decent flow tho You tryin to spit like a gun fight at the OK Coralle.. The clock hits high noon, that's the end of your profile.. ^weak for a closer... you need to work on punches all in all thought this was pretty close, but im giving it to vanilla, one or 2 personals with heavier punches... KLO, yours were too soft... vote=van |
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