~Just a Vision~
 

Aight..............since the one got deleted Writers Block...i finished another one cuz i didnt save my last one

10years of age in 1990 I ran from an escalating civil war~
Came to a Foriegn land with a scar~ came real far.
With nothing but just a vision-
Our parents had 2get us out from da bloody depression~
War agression inflicting the world 2day...
Pass generations, present generations, waiting to see what the future generation brings...
Or comes with...
Evil, Deceivably we all are equally falling down hard...
Some play smart, some are smart, & some are plain num at heart...
I say shuffle again to the dealer, I think you delt me the wrong hand...
How can it be? am always plottin da wrong plan?
Am I becoming the wrong man to hold a males stand?
Just a vision-->I listen, but I let my evil stand in all of my four courners~
Far gone, speaking for most, I think I lost my fuckin culture~


The End...

<Our parents had 2get us out from da bloody depression~
War agression inflicting the world 2day...
Pass generations, present generations, waiting to see what the future generation brings...damn...weird/nice i liked it..>BEST LINES
nice drop...1!

raw in a sense...certainly had strong emotions...

...liked how you just got right into it....the setting just being there, no need to reall dwell on it...

...off at times....not as well executed as it might've been..but it seems very personal..so no need to highlight it further...emotions can sometimes get the better of technical stuff n wha not...


...resp..

^^^^^ THnx VAr....N Illest.......yea this piece....i put alot of emotions into it....because thats what happens if you from a Another place....

this piece cries with emotion dawg, on the real..
i can tell this means alot to you..
illness..

stay up fam..

peace
onE

Saladin thnx i apreciate the feedback


Wun...UPPUN on thizzz

these are pretty much my thoughts exzactly. but i liked the flow
stay up

(Mad Man wipes tear from his eyes)

It was good man, I liked the topic, where did you come from though, I'm thinkin' middle east, but I'm probably way off.

Am from Jamaica.....LOL

good shyt came from the heart keep it up

THNX UPPUN

Nyce drop DuN
felt it from beginning to end
keep dropping iLL pieces...


War Lords!!!!!!!!!!...Alpha Ova and out

Repp it to the FUllest Homey

Thnx for the feedback i apreciate it


UPPUN

hmmmm....nice content...vocabs are enough but it would be better to slip some more....madd deep....vision of the world and shit....flows right to it....but couldve been better ya know...

ive seen some of ur works and u got talent...
do ur thing.....and hopin to read MORE of ur master pieces...

much repect

Thanks shawty.......UPPUN