Week One : Mr. Write vs. Moniker
 

check...wow didnt know this got off...woot.

here. what's the topic?

nvm, guess we pick our own from the list.

Good guess lawl. Hope you guys drop tonight. :)

do i still have to drop....i aint dropping a verse.......but here is mine and i aint late bruh i have been scouting RV and RB with invisible but i took it off to drop cus moniker aint showing...so


Your Face

The personality
Of you diverge willingly;
Gripping the other side of the pillow.
Softly stroking with gentle manicures,
Pedaling her rose around your smile.
Say cheese…
Your happiness so radiant,
Yet underneath it all hides all that is evil.
Tip toeing around your heart,
Shredding it piece by piece…
…or so I think.
So I gutted the pictures with scissors
More viciously than Edward (scissorhands)
…as you stood all alone.
Now you feel my pain,
with your blank expression;
hanging from the high of your mess.
leave with the wind and dont look back.

I can get something in today if thats agreeable.

The Semi-Cleansed Palette

And we'll call the dirt art...
A certain form of which, resembles
deliberate strokes of genius
we adjust in a complacent state.
Chaotic, but sperate in a way
less tastefull when the books are closed.
Open wide.
With the mouth of a new-born
I'm eating the few words
you scribbled on paper plates.
Even with all the fuss I can't accept
a little tongue-out-of-cheek
if you expect to force feed me complete
works that have been left to waste.
Shut that toothy grin while your in
a common place novel
second rate to the modern charts
staged to begin their debate on
the semi-cleansed palette...
when dirt's been established as art.
And an impeccable poem
is only considered to be lower totem;
easy to come by, deprived of mistakes.

sorry man you showed up late bruh....i choose to DQ you man....

Mr. Write-Your verse was good, I really enjoyed the read. It was what you would call "short, but sweet". You had good imagery and really created a very vivid picture to go along with your verse. I felt you went along with your topic in a unique way and got a good concept out of your topic.

Moniker-Your verse was meh okay, I felt you had a hard time painting any picture with imagery. Just didnt really do anything for me..Don't think you had your whole concept down for your topic. Better luck next week.

V/ Mr. Write, please hit my battle up as well.

No worries, it's understandable.