Track 10
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=242130
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=241859 Wrote this piece today to track 10 ovbiously lol... trackrunner? Imma a track star..jesse owens of the game lapping rap stars yall all actors,time to step on set luv the east but my be hood up in the west play the game like chess, make strategic moves or get checked mate.. thats how we roll on dudes ya see them rolling thru, but they aint coming back grim reaper of the game, ya I'm running that peep my attire, its chuck taylor's an white tees gotta a hundred hoes but hip-hops my wifey see, she likes me, and I like her back, never cheat on my bitch our love stays intact yea, I lay these rap,just to pave the way fluid like flow, gotta keep hydrate... at my rate, longs as there's beats going, jace gon' keep flowing, yall take shots, i'm on point free throwing , flow heat like d wade and Z morning I be zoning, on cali's finest a lil sticky icky.. makes a nigga mindless, I get picky picky when it comes to dimes and green its always been cream... eva since the 90's , not like these new rap dreams i've been griding.. jus that long to get my stacks strong hero like flow, its all act-ion... do it to the max-um I aint backin-off... betta quit acting soft or somethings, blasting-off. other than these lyrics,potato over a muzzle, you won't ever hear it. no one can hear ur troubles what's left ya spirit? I'll take that too.. Fatality! jace just Shaing 'sunned' you... |
errg.....lacked any lyrical capability...very basic and and didn't hold my interest past the first few lines, no offense just come original....Id love to read something I haven't seen a million times just under different alias.
stay up. |
it came nice and smooth when i read it....it was basic though...no complexity or punches had some wordplay and multis thats it though.......but this probably isn't your best anyways......~1~ keep writing....
|
Good looks on the feedback... I think I'm going to record this to show everyone kind of how I would flow it... I understand its not very complex but it goes really well with the beat I wrote it to. still uppin for feed.
|
it read nice to tha beat I was listenin to but you did use basic lines even tho I do it sometime threw a couple multi's into it man shit would sound better and be better
|
ayo
over all i liked it b....i felt ya flow on it
basic or no basic aslong as the you carry the beat and da beat doesnt carry you...mission accomplished ya herd...good shit keep it up |
Good looks man.
|
YO HONESTLY FUCK WHAT THEY WAS SAYING...
I thought it flow good man word up...... creativeness wasnt to impressive but you kept it going... not that many punchline but you had a couple attemp's.... i feel like you can def get better man for-real just keep writing... ya flow good... work on punches and metaphores word... 7.5 outta 10 not bad man.... can you give me feed back on my newest drop CALLED: DIG DEEP.... holla back one.. |
since I need two links so i'll give you feed... "It sucks'
|
Quote:
cnt chu ever say anythin nice...all dis bullshit be cummin out but u aint good urself boy |
Quote:
do i need to kick your ass again? |
Quote:
lmao...nigga when u got me last time i jus started...now is different...while i was gone i was actually doin shit instead of bein an internet gangster |
Quote:
then lets do this. |
All times are GMT -4. The time now is 06:30 AM. |