break-down-my-verse-plz
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Makin ya eyes black...You are white kid, get that through ur head
Fuck Axioms sig... ...You should be the representative for white Wonder Bread! i know Axe's sig, but this just didn't connect....also never say "white kid" or something that kind of disses white people in general (or any race) because white people are probably 80% of the voters. If you diss the voters why should they vote for you? Wait a second, you can check second into a battle...but aren't you timeless Contradictin ya own names...why don't you just call urslef Mindless not a punch...definately not hard In my signature it states that if u PM for votes, then you'll get fucked So then why do it and say i should have no beef...but aren't you a duck?* beef and duck have no corillation. This id not hard hitting at all. This battle like the tortoise vs the hare...either one u r, ur just too slow Yea ya timeless... ...Cuz you don't realize your winning streak is going to go! another big nope But now I wonder why your timeless? suicidal thoughts makin u cry? Don't worry... ...I'll toss ya out a window so you can discover how time can fly ha...by far the best line in the verse...the only downer is that I've seen "time fly" lines before Your record is 5-0, no wonder u gots no cents, so ya mind obsolete You tryin to diss me like g-unit...but in the end...i'm "Cass-in- Di-Feat" ** horrible attempt at word play Wasnt feeling this verse. You should work on punches. Read people who are considered ill battlers. If you write a line and it doesnt even make you laugh, you know it will have no effect on the voters. Also be more witty. Dont be so overt with your disses. Be more sudle. Make your opponent look bad, while at the same time making it seem like your not even trying. Anyway, that's my oppinion. Take it if you want. -W1 |
Makin ya eyes black...You are white kid, get that through ur head
Fuck Axioms sig... ...You should be the representative for white Wonder Bread! ----you aren't really saying anything this isnt an "OUCH" personal Wait a second, you can check second into a battle...but aren't you timeless Contradictin ya own names...why don't you just call urslef Mindless ---not a punch...sorry:( In my signature it states that if u PM for votes, then you'll get fucked So then why do it and say i should have no beef...but aren't you a duck?* ----no...this is just...no This battle like the tortoise vs the hare...either one u r, ur just too slow Yea ya timeless... ...Cuz you don't realize your winning streak is going to go! ----this was slightly average...wording killed it But now I wonder why your timeless? suicidal thoughts makin u cry? Don't worry... ...I'll toss ya out a window so you can discover how time can fly ----this by far was your best punch...why? because it had a concept it was terrible played though but rest assure this is what punches should look like Your record is 5-0, no wonder u gots no cents, so ya mind obsolete You tryin to diss me like g-unit...but in the end...i'm "Cass-in- Di-Feat" ** ------defeat lines are played...punches on records are gay...no concept all in all if you follow what you said you will eliminate more of the bad ones and end up with more or less a more consistent verse |
Umm.... I'd break your verse down but you should scrap essentially all of it
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Lol....
T-west.. you need some elevating Your punches were just to soft... It was like... Don Knots boxing |
lol fuck! text battling just ain't my thing I guess...when you freestyle, basically everyline ppl sayin "ohhh"
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^Real rapping is better anyway, homie...
Text is for people with no lives.........Like me:) -W1 |
/\ all you people who didn't provide some help don't post again
as it is considered freeposting. . .serioulsy either help this kid or battle him |
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