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Limited Edition vs MetaSkriptz
Battle Rules:
topical battle 15-15 No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting topic Family Issues Minimum posts to vote: 20 Check in by: 12-11-04 at 11:26 AM Must drop verse in 360 minutes after check in. |
Limited Edition has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-11-04 05:26 AM.
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MetaSkriptz has ACCEPTED this battle on 12-11-04 05:28 AM.
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...What Happened..?... ...Everything Was...So Perfect... The streets are filled with rain...memories fill my brain... ...They way everybody was happy...will it be like that again? My eyes filled with blury visions...what were my parents' decision? ...A little child, I was blind...divorce was in action from the beginnin' Carefree, and playful...the memories slip by so swift and graceful... ...I couldn't see the very salt that would make my life distasteful One incident, now somethin' worse...now my grandfather's in a hearse... ...The family erupts in war over the will...is this what Albert deserves? My grandma looses the land...nobody really truly understands... ...My mom's life get's better...when she met Chad and the Strands The divorce is heated...who will be the victor, who will be defeated..? ...Trouble wit girls...every ounce of my soul is torn apart, secreted Then Jenn walks in...the happiness in my life, renewed, it begins.... ...But my mom and her dad had to take control and make it end... A new battle is created...the beef between my mom and me is over-stated... ...She kicks me out of the house, my brother is held by metal, steel-plated I'm so confused, my brain's lossed...how much does all the pain cost..? ...It doesn't matter, because now my entire family is in chaos... |
Topic Family Issues confused images of horrific alcohol provoked beatings... memorys abused dipicting a troubled past in meetings... a failed desperete grasp for a superior father figure to last.. feelings held inside by this mask the criteria doesnt allow you to laugh.. always suspicious remaining distilled while potraying anger supplied images.. beloved influences all parished obsticles fallen these are lifes scrimiges.. answers never prevail just questions asked a tear for every session past.. becomes a struggle with every day tasks tears become rivers excluding lifes rafts.. now hes askin pleadin with a passion why he was even born wishes he was deceased.. everynight room gets trashin with a thrashin job consists of passing out receipts.. homelife his mom doesnt see any expressions as he details lifes lessons.. submerged words an thoughts cannot be displayed as he neglects his confessions.. inraged hatred fueld my numerous rejections provided ourburts of injections.. intelligence hidden behind the sadness of the heart in divided sections.. lifes a do or die as he grabs the gun an says i choose to die... |
good job man.......................................
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Same to you...uppin' this shit.
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This was feedback posted for Limited Edition
Whoa Good Job Limit Edition........that Was Good Nice Fam
Meta- Yours Was Good To Nice |
Voted For: MetaSkriptz
i vote for metaskriptz cuz he came more complex and used metaphores which i thought were interesting.limited edition did very well too,i liked his story line and i can see the emotion in both peices but i just liked the way metaskripts was taken it slighty more.very close battle...too bad ties dont exist in RV.well.. vote/metaskriptz RETURN THE FAVOR IN MY sig thx |
A'ight thanks...returning the favor right now. Uppin' for some more votes.
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A'ight...uppin' for some votes, don't sleep on this shit...favors will be returned.
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Uppin' for some more votes on this shit...........
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A'ight this battle has been slept on...uppin' for votes...favors will be returned...
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Voted For: MetaSkriptz
This Was A Tuff Battle Cuz What One Person Lacked The Other Had... So It Made It Even In The End... But Overall It Came Down To Flow Cuz Both Had Pretty Decent Storylines/Imagry(LE Alittle Better)/Vocab... But L.E.'s Structure Was Anoying And Too List Like... And It Got Irritating Having To Pause Constantly While Meta's Was Alot Smoother Of A Read... .One. |
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