Where I'm At
 

Where Am i at?

Heres a verse i posted against Illynice...
please help me out...

Thanx :thumbup:

Left Text for a while, but still i break kids like twigs..
And leave ill with bigger bags under his eye's...
...Than the man in his Sig.
Dont let ya boots get to big..Face it in reality your lame..
And ya verse is confusing me, even more than your name..
By no way are we the same...Your piss-poor...weak at best.
I'll make a challenge of whoring you, and then put you to the test..
'My intelligence begins where yours peaks at'...that may be true..
your brain is superior over me,as my punches are over you..
..This lessons firm but true...FL kids are brutally lacking talent...
I eat MC's Daily...And your just adding to my weight balance..

this actually was a good verse.. you had some creative punches in there and two nice presonals.. the flow was great and never fell off..ya struct was also great and your lines were perfect length... if you added even some more metas and wordplay into it you could make the verse even better and harder hitting... nice verse overall though.. and you will only elevate too, you are pretty good.. even check out some LLL battles and try to learn from them..

not really....he is average for FL

he just has that structure everyone abuses and does
not know how to use

^ Word

Also, your wording was terrible. Reword your punches so that you get the best possible out come from your lines. It really takes away from your verse when you have an ok concept, but lacks potential when you word it wrong.

yeah need elevation............

Structure was Kinda Wack, other than that pretty nice....Look at at this kid hard hitter just Basically freepostin to get his posts up....(pathetic)