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naw..I'm not going to brag...but I know I'm not wack..but I'm not the greatest..and thats what I want to be..so here are the link to my 3 battles that I have been in..tell me what you think..please comment..negative and positive..say anything that comes to your mind..I need information on how I can get better..

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...highlight=dixie

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...highlight=dixie

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...highlight=dixie

^^those are the links^^..tell me what yall think..

I read your first link, and it seems as if you focus on multies before punches.

that is a big no no....never think about multies before a punch.

also your structure is fucking retarded....try to keep all your lines
shorter and relatively the same length

this possibly killed any chance you had in the 1-2;)

you cant do that:(..tjhats not fair..and explain to me..just because your lines not the same length doesnt mean that your verse still cant flow..

Your lines can still set forth a nice, decent flow..
Regardless the length of ur bars..just that a cleaner structure makes it an easier read..& just looks better overall.
Its just more appealin'.. n another catagory for u to win. basically.

/\your not exactly right

see to us reading it a line implicates half of a bar, so if we are rapping it over a beat you cant have a long ass line, because the syllables will make it off flow.

if you keep an eye on ure syllabes it will not be a really long bar, its just the way it it....anyway you are asking for text help and the way it is, is that you must keep them somewhat even with each other....

True..also like you said when u stretch your bars..ppl will have to read on to long to find the rhyme..
Which doesnt compliment the flow..
Also..this has probably been said many times before..
Just do a little research..view some of ur opponents previous battles, dig through his profile & sig area etc..
N try to combine your punches with personal facts..
A real personal is hard to do..unless the person ur battlin has been here for a while..but usually its hard to come up with real personals.. so just try to combine some of his custom things with punches..to slightly direct your punches more accurate.

I came up with real personals on that jay-twist kid..that fag erased everything in his member profile..but I still won..okay..yall so my only problem is with my lines?

yes dont be gay with your line length

If your lines are stretched
People dont like to read them
Thats why you shouldn't stretch it
Real vets lines are short and good
They set up there lines short
and keep every line same length
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Thats how they keep their length and structure

/\well thats just a little too short but he has the right idea...

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