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-Limited Edition ...vs... Lyricide-
::::..Rules..:::: 20 Lines Minimum 30 Lines Maximum Check In By 6-26-04 Spits Due By 6-28-04 Votes End 6-30-04 Topic: Life After Death Good Luck To Both! 'MetaSkriptz' |
A'ight checkin in dawg.........good luck...when I first saw this I thought somebody opened up a battle against me not knowing...haha...w/e...
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The final breath I exhumed on earth was conceiving no lie
"Our love is eternal and together soon we will meet in the skys" As my eyelids shut, god must have sliced the cord of which gravity held me down Heavy as a feather, my soul elevated to the white melting clouds I floated in utter emptyness which contained neither liquid, solid nor gas Five senses became none as death started mauling my grasp I was left with only my mind and soul, with eternal time to think About the beutiful woman i'd left behind..i flinched Seldom had situation been more painful without psyical involvment How could god be so cruel as to finish my soul..gone Now i started to shatter, the force disintegrated my soul I'd dissolve into nothing, by being incinarated without coal But what if...? The noise was impulsing, the ground split in two ways I could feel the melting hot lava miles away, what had come? doomsday Fear in my sweat as i fell deep into a chasm Grabbed my ballz quick, because i heard the demon would have them Then met Satan himself...all laden in wealth Assigned me to eternal labour or be cast into the flames of hell Heat devoured my skin, blood poured on the floor, only flesh remained on the rib plates I'd rather my soul be ultimated than regurgitating spitcakes Infinite others stared in shock as I told Lucifer to go "Fuck~Himself"...even time was baked Sure i got fucking~dealt with, he tore off each of my needled limbs and cast them into blind fate... |
Life After Death
A'yo...
Ascention... Peaceful...death doesn't hurt...I'm above tha clouds No more pain...no more shit....no more teary frowns My feelins...emotions...living up to my inner devotions This cloudy ocean...relaxin' wit angels singin'...composin' Judgment from the Lord... God...please embrace me...I am hopin' that you take me Nobody could understand...I haven't been followin you lately I want to learn peace...Inside I know that I've been weak I am on hands and knees...I have been giving in...cause Im meak I want to be...here in this holy place...here wit my family Forgive me Lord...I have sinned...the Devil has damaged me I have tried to live by Your Word...but life is more I could take Please take my soul..fill me wit love...replace my burning hate Lord...this is life after death...I know theres no turnin back I have never done Meth...I have never smoked any crack Waking-up... My sweat drips down my face...my eyes scream open I better put my sould back in faith...my soul is broken A'ight...hope thats enough lines...Im in BC right now, its 11:40PM...peace... |
yo this was tight, both of you had nice imagery in your drops. I was feeling both drops, i like the concepts between both drops. this one was real close but i gotta give this to lyricide. I think Limited would have had a chance had you dropped more lines into your verse, cuz it was hot, just not detailed or long enough. You went 16 lines and the minimum was 20, it hurt you because you didnt get enough into your story.
No hate but my vote goes to lyricide. |
Yeah thats coo. I will probably get DQ'd for the 16 lines anyway.
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lyricide - decent story...a bit awkward...but creative....vocab was nice but some shit didnt make sense...wordplay lacked...example of shit not making sense would be...
Heavy as a feather, my soul elevated to the white melting clouds feathers arent heavy...lmao....umm flow sucked.....stretched lines.....but good spti....i give it a 6.2/10.... l.e. - hmm u did a creative storyline...of begging to have a life after death...and it worked....good imagery and a way better flow....vocab was good....ur shit made more sense and was more creative....give it a 7.4/10... Vote- Limited Edition Will both of you please go drop an honest vote in my topical in this tuorny with spul...its slept on....thanks.... |
i will in abit but...to any manager...his verse wuz 16 lines min wuz 20...and this vote obviously want great cuz
"example of shit not making sense would be... Heavy as a feather, my soul elevated to the white melting clouds feathers arent heavy...lmao....umm flow sucked" he obviousy did not get the metaphors in my spit which were on every line almost but no hate...kepp the vote i guess |
I guess its a draw...where the fuck are all the mods?
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We are here im, Im just trying to get the tourny through then im retired
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Oh...there you are. A'ight...wat happens in this situaton?
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Yall Wait till Votes come in and they decide the winners
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Limited Edition-You came aight and a nice
place of imaginery...Stayed on focus and pretty good vocab and how you devided them up gave me and closer image and idea of it Lyricide-You came aight up there but I think you kindof slipped and I thought you was a lil imaginery and almost imaginery to beat him and aight Vocab but nice Drop v/Limited Edition Return the favor in my Topical battle please |
Battle still goes on becuz the first vote was voted after the vote date was up
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