J-Mill - When I'm Dead
 

This track waz actually made about a month ago but i wanted to give yall a taste of my shit!

Concept: About how people wanna hate when ur alive, but when u die they act like they were ur best friend and they say they loved u n shit when they really hated on ya the whole time u were alive.

Hi-Fi:http://www.soundclick.com/util/getp...id=4470903&q=hi
Lo-Fi: http://www.soundclick.com/util/getp...id=4470903&q=lo

Links:
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3099806
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3099805

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this hurts my ears. ur flow needs massive work, i dont like ur sound that much...and the mix is terrible. the hook needs to b re-written...ehhhh

good concept...but retry the whole thing. not tryin to b a dick...but u need to get back to basics and re-look at everything

appr. feed

uppin

I liked the intro I am def. feeling that shit

def. didn't hurt my ears but u def. got some work to do my dude....you gotta put more emotion and pressense into that shit.....i'm serious u got potential ur lyrics are real

good shit keep it up

^^rele appr. that feed

i noticed that 2 though my energy is shitty i deff gotta step dat up thanx

uppin

ight ya voice is coo i like the intro but the quality is down in it......u need better flow sounds so choppy smooth it out......kinda borin i like the rhymescheme tho.... emotion n presence is needed u sound like u got no confidence hook needs a lil worrk overall pretty decent man rtf

yo man u gotta up ya emotion.........practice ya verse in front of a mirror and see how ya would deliver it man........

ya flow is choppy at some parts...with a slow flow like the one u took u must up ya delivery and make it interesting.....

quality it is what it is...but it's not that bad it's peakin at some certain parts....

Overall - u got potential like PT said but ya gotta work on ya flow..count syllables...spit ova and ova till it flows together....aiite man...keep ya head up man....

pz

~1~

appr. dat that waz a rele good peace of feed black dragon


n thanx to tha others that left feed

im takin everythang into consideration

uppin