“Deep inside of me”
 

:shoot: The world is out to get me don’t you see,

As you know nothing on earth is free,

But we all try to make it through the day,

We are tired of what people have to say,

Man it’s almost time for me to leave the nest,

One thing to do is not get killed like the rest,

So I must confess….

And also get this off my chest,

All I want to do is live my life to the fullest,

I want my heart to grow to be the biggest,

Sit home drink a bottle of gin,

Knowing no matter what I do nothing is gonna rid my sins,

Laying In the grass looking up at the stars,

Ha-ha thinking about how my heart is connected to me from afar,

I wish people will understand,

That I’m not that average type of man,

I wish god will see that I’m not free,

Because these are thoughts that’s deep inside me

This was good...You should play around with your structure a bit...You should keep writing and you'll get better...You did tell a story and the connection from the first line to the last was excellent...keep it up