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Reincarnation
Me = Regular Font Color Satan = Dark Red I can't even believe this, i might as well die... put a gun to my throat with my head held high.. I'm livin without reason, my feelings are useless.. Damged nerves from hatred, these beatings abusive.. Dysfunctional family, not a friend for my own... Not a friendly dude so friendship is blown... why don't i just end this..my future is torment.. how can I be positive when oppurtunitys dormant.. Tears of blood drop down, leavin stains on my face.. and my only chance of happiness remains in a safe.. Unlock it impossible, i handed the key to satan.. I've never been loved so how can i refrain from hatin.. I've felt this way forever, well ..up untill just lately.. I met a woman who could improve my fate greatly.. It was love at first sight, and i felt she knew it too.. I told her "if i do anything good, i'll do it through you".. i spent every moment with this girl, awake or asleep.. I knew cupid hit me hard, how did he take it this deep.. I was walkin home from her crib, it was wet it was gloomy.. Her gaze had me locked, and the thought just pursued me.. that i would marry this girl, i loved her, had nothin to lose.. right at that same time a speedin truck came into view.. i tried to dodge it, and he tried at the same time it slid painfully connecting the frame with my spine.. I layed there motionless, bloodied face down in the dirt.. askin why am i cursed, while i'm embracin the hurt.. Than i heard a voice, it was deep it was cold.. Ironically, it was satan, listen to this secret he told.. "I've fucked with you a lot, you've been a lot of fun.. I expected you a long time ago, goin down with a gun.. but than came this girl, and my tricks came to an end.. I guess you outsmarted me, tell me would you do it again?" "Listen devil, she was all I had, and i loved her dearly.. I'd do anything to get her back, i mean than sincerely.." "Here's the deal, I'll see to it than your born once more.." "i don't mean to be rude, but honestly, what the fuck for" "The catch is, you'll live the same life as you did in the past I understand if it's not worth it, knowing it didn't last.." "I'll do it, reincarnate me..and I know this is sin.. But i'll spend a life in hell to be in "heaven" again.." "Thats good to hear, I knew some how you'd understand.. Even though you didn't know you wouldn't be born on this land.. You'll be born again, just in hell, i never specified where.. "You said I'd be with her again, you snake, this shit ain't fair.. You lied to me, tried to act cool, but how is a myth Just?" "Quit your bitchin homie, we're takin your girflriend with us" |
omg that is some cool shit there, nice flow, nice story and emotion, good job. 8/10
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Sup V some dope shit man I think you really have to be one of the most under
rated people on RV... Thats the best topical verse I have read this year.. Dope flow, Hott vocab all round dope verse uping for my boi 1~ |
uppin this shit right here
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uppin again....................i'm gonna keep uppin this
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dog this was hot. It didnt get about reincarnation until the very end but at the end it went out with a bang but you know let me shut up cause i don't do topicals i'm just a battler and barely decent at that. Anyway keep doing ya thing dog. we still gonna battle or what.
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i only do topical battles...if you really want to..we can...pick up a topic..and get at me..thanks for the feedback too bruh
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good shit...it was tight...flow was str8...metaphores were good...8/10
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uppin....again..again...and again
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uppin.....cause it needs to be read....this is good
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"I'll do it, reincarnate me..and I know this is sin..
But i'll spend a life in hell to be in "heaven" again.." dope as peice this is going to be nominated for one of the open mics of the month |
another masterpiece vish.
once again...........no complaints whatsoever, word. the vocab, structure, creativity, emotion and flow was all on point. i loved the little trademark in-vish style twist to the ending crhymie. that shit was sick. willa speaks the truth......this piece definately deserves a nomination nod for the month. keep up the spectacular work homie. oner... ...the super......crhyme sindicate |
some real shit right here fam...10/10...mos def felt tha emotion and i could put myself into tha peice...dats what made it good to me...keep doin ya thang cuz...4real
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^^^ Gotta agree wit da rest.....
Vocab - Wuz real good...you showed you had range and datz wut mostly sets DOPE mc's\femcee's apart from the rest...you worked it good Wordplay - Went hand and hand wit your vocab...becuz if u wouldve OVERWORKED your vocab it would've threw ya wordplay off but u worked it good It was deep and I was feelin tha story like format.....really couldnt find a weakness in this one...keep droppin yo...holla at cha gurL...1n3 4.8\5 |
^^^UPPIN'!!!^^^
...the super...CRHYME SIN... |
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