Poetry try #2
 

Lost in the abyss missing familiar feelings
I thought I had no limit til i hit the glass ceiling
Now I feel opressed depressed and full of spite see
Regret cuz I can't accept that you used to like me
I can't get past the fact that you never stated your emotions
I'm rekindling lost memories as i'm simultaneoustly freeposting
Fuck tommorow, what could've... will never be. I feel so hollow
Living with sorrow, girls don't measure up, you a hard act 2 follow
Lost in oblivion,still living in the past I once cherished
How can I continue living when our love has perished?

it was sweet n simple... nothing overbaring... i really enjoyed reading
it.... but personally i believe in fate... whats meant to be will be..
the only line i didnt like was the one with opressed depressed... that
just didnt make sense to me... other than that i give it a 5...
your vocab wasnt all that but you still held it down structure
was good tho... Keep Writing.

this is a gud peice...you kud add a lil bit more to it tho bcuz there waz very little imagery in this

............fav part............


Lost in the abyss missing familiar feelings
I thought I had no limit til i hit the glass ceiling
Now I feel opressed depressed and full of spite see
Regret cuz I can't accept that you used to like me

oo i like this peice, kind of a connected to it. it could of been longer still was good.. fav lines..
Lost in the abyss missing familiar feelings
I thought I had no limit til i hit the glass ceiling

I can't get past the fact that you never stated your emotions
I'm rekindling lost memories as i'm simultaneoustly freeposting
Fuck tommorow, what could've... will never be. I feel so hollow
^^ feeling this, i jus broke up with a guy that never spoke his mind. i feel hallow to.
keep it up peace ~roX~

thanks y'all, I didn't get to put much feeling into this one as I should've... It was just a reply to some guy who was spitting some emo stuff in the freestyle cypher.... Next time i'll try and work on the imagery and a little more in other areas too...

My fav line in my own thread... (he can't be that arrogant can he.. lol)

.........................................and full of spite see
Regret cuz I can't accept that you used to like me

That was the only one I really felt... cuz the rest was really just trying to get stuff to rhyme... Thanks for the feedback..