vs 1 arm Marvel
 

rules:
1. 10 lines
2. check in
3. spit

i check...........

who are you?
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me names jamie, dat cool wit u, cause if it aint fuck u

u aint pretty enough to fuk me, cornhole
ether or why do check in are you taken marvel place?

No he aint.....im checking in, go check in our battle jamie iight......attitude or what.

Ok 10 lines coming up dude..........

a quick shun to the guy whose name i forgot when i set thread
how Ill is you, when Jamie had to cheerlead your check in instead
i have no idea on what kind of bullshit Marv will say when spitten
i weaken my punches not to get the k.o., but 2 hear his submission
any verse you put out will not be credited as the Marvel Arm types
when your flow stinks like your asshole and your flow far from tight
put your dickryders pals aside cause battlin me theres isn't any rules
dickrydin me happens 2 hours after your mom drops you off for school
quickly break Marv n his bones shatter even watch his dome splatter
now we both can realize in what you say in its intent wont matter

peAce

Ok Ok Checkin in
Your time is now, prepare to be slane.
I find you hiding in a ditch just like Sadam Hussain.....
Following a yellow shit road, your a cowardly lion,
You couldnt be the one if you protected Zion.
You think your an evil...bombsquad killer,
but you flopped like a sequal, same jokes and all filler.
Your beating yourself up trying to masturbate,
But now you've hurt your only friend and he's spitting with hate.
You'd better chat to me soon, has a cat got ya tongue?
The only furr in your mouf was left by the last one...
You cant get no pussy cuz you aint no dawg,
Your only a mouse making noise cuz ya wearing clogs.
Im sick of dick riders like you swaying votes,
Its time you elevated like planes on approach.
You wont take off cuz ya laden with seamen,
Takes you back to Navy days when your ass was bleeding.

16 lines......

we agreed on 10 though
man take off 6 that hooten nany

you cant rap after the buzzer rings, buzzer rings battles over.
to all voters seriously dont peep Marvel Arm last 6 their obslete.

Ok Ok Checkin in

Following a yellow shit road, your a cowardly lion,
You couldnt be the one if you protected Zion.
You think your an evil...bombsquad killer,
but you flopped like a sequal, same jokes and all filler.
Your beating yourself up trying to masturbate,
But now you've hurt your only friend and he's spitting with hate.
Im sick of dick riders like you swaying votes,
Its time you elevated like planes on approach.
You wont take off cuz ya laden with seamen,
Takes you back to Navy days when your ass was bleeding.

Sorry dude I got confused, heres my edited verse, everyone has to vote using this verse not the above one which was too long iight peace......

Marvel, your first verse was not god enuff, it was very wise of you to put on different one which was alot better because it could be read.
Even with this in mind i have hand this one to The Evil one. No wonder he's called the bomb squad; he defused you bomb, no hassle.
Evel, you took this from the first verse coz you said exctly what i was thinking when i read Jamie's post, i.e.
"a quick shun to the guy whose name i forgot when i set thread
how Ill is you, when Jamie had to cheerlead your check in instead"
Evil had better structure and harder punches too.
Breakdown:
Opener-evilbombsquad
structure-evil bombsquad
metas-Marvel(tried a few)
Closer-Evil(marvel didn't make sense at the end)

And by the way approaching plane dont elevate!

What are you playing at chump how did my last line not make sense? if you dont understand it dont vote....plus this is the same verse idiot with some lines taken out? how blind are you or did he just vote on one of yours hugh?

by the way im the marvel arm aswell incase you were spun out.................

a quick shun to the guy whose name i forgot when i set thread
how Ill is you, when Jamie had to cheerlead your check in instead
you forgot your name... LoL and you just fucked his up.. Your openign was alright.. Follow through was alright
i have no idea on what kind of bullshit Marv will say when spitten
i weaken my punches not to get the k.o., but 2 hear his submission
played follow through, i can were ive heard it before.. set could have been better
any verse you put out will not be credited as the Marvel Arm types
when your flow stinks like your asshole and your flow far from tight
Funny.. like an hour ago or less i posted a line almost SIMILAR to your follow through in diss the person above you cypher... its an ok line :)
put your dickryders pals aside cause battlin me theres isn't any rules
dickrydin me happens 2 hours after your mom drops you off for school
eh.. kind of played, and to have it as a set and a follow through for your bar, i dunno wrong choice heresince it was kind of simple, and not that directed
quickly break Marv n his bones shatter even watch his dome splatter
now we both can realize in what you say in its intent wont matter
weak ending.. could have come off harder with a hit

Over all i thought your punchs could have been a little harder with a few more personal shits in there... Dog whoa, with bars that stretched you really need more multis i didnt see much in a sense of flow here.. It was basic. metaphors were alright



Following a yellow shit road, your a cowardly lion,
You couldnt be the one if you protected Zion.
played.. played... neither line is that hard, and ive heard both types of lines ( not subject matter in the past two weeks on this board)
You think your an evil...bombsquad killer,
but you flopped like a sequal, same jokes and all filler.
[b] eh, follow through isnt half bad.. could have reworded the concept though.. Over all weak punch though, set wasnt much
Your beating yourself up trying to masturbate,
But now you've hurt your only friend and he's spitting with hate.
needed rewording, and a little bit better of a concept.. this punch was weak
Im sick of dick riders like you swaying votes,
Its time you elevated like planes on approach.
set up wasnt bad.. but the lack of strength on follow through really hurt the punch, other than that it was a dope bar
You wont take off cuz ya laden with seamen,
Takes you back to Navy days when your ass was bleeding.
not much of an ending.. could have been spit better.. the punch is decent, but not much

Of all this could have been more punch filled as well as a little but better metaphors, the ones your had were basic, and the personals werent there as much. Your flow was alright but needs improvment.

Vote- evilbombsquad

hit with harder punchs, and better metaphors over all.

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