Politicz
Increasing intensity of something with vast density
Toying with an entity that isn’t real smart of man. Blapshemes and hypocrites aren’t in fair standing in this land. Laying down their mighy hand trying to rule the world While we sit back and watch this monstrosity unfurl Do they not hear the cries of the weak and young? They have souls of a murderer and eyes of ice they will sell each other if they get a right price. But yet they reign supreme like eagles on sunbeams Raising the bar, eating up power, listening to cha ching in a tower. While the rich get richer and the poor get poorer The dumb get dumber and the whore gets whorer. Where do we end? Where do we start? The world needs reform. God is all we got. Each day we wake up in our own little worlds, not really seeing the tragedy that be wilds, Nothing in this world is beautiful anymore, all replaced by technology, slums and polluted shores. The Earth is screaming “mutiny” and we aren’t even using scrutiny because once we’re gone its all we’ve got, save for a little piece of a 6 foot deep plot. But yet they reign supreme like eagles on sunbeams Raising the bar, eating up power, listening to cha ching in a tower. While the rich get richer and the poor get poorer The dumb get dumber and the whore gets whorer. Where do we end? Where do we start? The world needs reform. God is all we got. Try to strive in this land we’ve made, even though it daily fades. With tasteless shows of gays on parade We drink and kill the young each day. What has become of the USA? Great ol’ American flag on display, can we hit rewind and edit the mistakes? Will God wipe us out because we’re too similar to Sodom and Gomorrah, think about it and it might seem a little clearer. |
vocab..........is nice
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this was pretty good, flow was good, topic was good, vocab and wordplay were ok, structure was ok, overall pretty good read, keep it up
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THIS piece was mad good, i felt ya concept...had good flow......good imagery and emotions.....ya problem still remains.......u need help on ya structure.......ull get it one day 5.5/10......rtf
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lol, thank ya'll 4 the feed, real appreciative, uppin
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Closed no link....
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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=206443 my link, forgot.
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