Thrust vs. Theo Ginn(dope topical)
topic: Fenced In
no non topical battlers should vote on this unless u really know what a topical is cuz i've seen people vote on topicals saying whoever had better punches so yeah... if u aren't topically intelligant.. don't vote lol i'ma type my verse up now theo..just get urs on here asap |
Fenced In
Enclosure to my perjure over throws the urge to escape While exposure to this space leaves my starry eyes draped Four walls overhaul gravities magnitude to my thought As pressure try’s to pull im merely schooled in this court All dimensions inflicting pressure my area grows lesser Pleasure sacrificed in this measure for worse or for better My expressions unseen…light beams pierce the darkness The compression screens my dreams of an esteemed vastness Isolation breaking....the reason….contemplating freedom But the compassion shaking my mind denies me a reason The perimeter closing my chosen path is now obstructed Left conducted by the aspersion that the guilty constructed Leaving me caged…enslaved…rage engaged just ignored And all motions displayed…….don’t penetrate the core Amounting to nothing the controllers bluffing commands Only spiritual toughness can maintain my sitting on my hands The same blood stained corners grow warmer in times Because my brain is in trauma and my eyes turning blind Oxygen lessens my lungs stress and seize contemplating Mind resting………………the fence begins replicating g/l |
*A Baby's Cry*
Help! Oh Mother... I'm sufficating drastically Come to my rescue, Otherwise witness a catrastaphy The breaths i can't breathe, Outside of my reach I can't see the light at the end that i seek The clocks an enemy, Time is firmly against us if you could turn the hands back, Would u quit drugs? Admit it Mom, I'm trapped, Blambed squarly on you I won't see my destination...Or the possibility of my own too I'm horrified of you, You're carelessness of being a mother... Has turned into a casulty, And teers among others No wonder you kept smoking, It's obvious, I can't catch air My mouth opens fragily just to get toxins here and there not even born yet, But not like i'd I'll maintin life anyways Doctors have submitted, You just request forgetting the baby Her selfish plea came to reality, Like snatched from me... Mom open your eyes please, Witness a bright future cease.. I'm not even a memory No hatred amongst you cuz i can't mention... You let me die! You kept me Fenced In! |
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Vote/Origin
Props to both here as both grabbed topic well I was equalled in pretty much all cats except for Flow which I think Origin came very Nicely in Thrust once again produced a nice piece but jus lacked Depth...not that thats a bad thing coz sumtimes hanging on the fringes can be good but this time it wudda helped to get deeper.... but overall nice topics followed pz MAKE SURE YA'LL CHECK THIS OUT PLZ WEN YA SSE THIS MAD MAD MAD MAD SLEPT ON http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...06&page=1&pp=15 |
This was a good topical...
I really liked this...very close.. With theo.. I liked his flow..and imagery really nice...structure was good too.. Trust's approach was very creative indeed he came with a nice flow.. but lacked vocab..I thought Very good read though..I was impressed by both so v/Theo hit this up with an honest vote please...its getting slept on http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...t=108562&page=1 |
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i'm sorry but u can't just decide a vote by judging a better vocab
to me it clutters a verse with words you never use on an ordinary basis i only use words i do use... i'm no dictionary uppin |
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jesus this is slept on
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vote/ thrust
he basically took this battle in every aspect... good flow and imagery vocabulary was definately better i think in my opinion on theo's part.. thrust had better flow also but he didnt get too deep... emotion wasnt really there but theo lacked in other areas so that made up for your lack of emotion and depth both had pretty good imagery i think thrust takes the imagery aspect by a little but definately a decent topical battle vote: thrust |
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