blackfrostbite vs VISION
 

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6 - UNLIMITED Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting
no P.M. for votes

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VISION has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-14-05 07:07 PM.

blackfrostbite has ACCEPTED this battle on 07-14-05 08:12 PM.

yo quit tryin to be Raven,you can't see in da future/
'member Ray Charles and Stevie are ya muses/
haha,dis amuses me,lol,you make me laugh/
i can see ahead of time though when i hit da blunt to fast/
yo head to da doc,have ya eyes checked out/
cuz i want you to be able to read da bars im tossin out/
ouch!dat right must be like a stab to ya eye/
in ya sig,dat skull resembles ya face,its in ya eye/
dis is so obvisous,anyone could see it/
how you gone have a name like vision,but ya loss you couldn't see it/

i know you see dat!!!!
lol
holla

You've got the wrong kind of RIME/Rhyme
and now you're Frozen in time,
but that heat that VISION speaks
will defrost you're behind.

You stumbled across a lyrical boss mr.frost,
or should i say frosty u softy, take a loss.

This wanna b stepped in front of me,
now it's slushies on the house.
he ain't talkin no more.
I put a lid on his mouth.

With this sick,twisted,verbalistic rhyming device.
think twice, i'm precise
and you're slippin on ice.

YELLOW SNOW is you're name bi$#%

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votes

whats the deal yo no votes no battle.........................

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Voted For: VISION

yo quit tryin to be Raven,you can't see in da future/
'member Ray Charles and Stevie are ya muses/
UM...OK I GUESS
haha,dis amuses me,lol,you make me laugh/
i can see ahead of time though when i hit da blunt to fast/
IS THIS A PUNCH?
yo head to da doc,have ya eyes checked out/
cuz i want you to be able to read da bars im tossin out/
OK
ouch!dat right must be like a stab to ya eye/
in ya sig,dat skull resembles ya face,its in ya eye/
TRYING
dis is so obvisous,anyone could see it/
how you gone have a name like vision,but ya loss you couldn't see it/
OK...WELL NOT REALLY...EHH


BREAKDOWN-VERE WASN'T GOOD AT ALL...YOU ARE SUPPOSED TO ELEVATE THE MORE THAT YOU ARE ON THE WEBSITE...IT SEEMS LIKE YOU HAVE DECLINED...YOUR VOCAB ISN'T GOOD AT ALL...AND YOUR PUNCHES AREN'T HIITIN AT ALL...YOUR PERSONALS ALSO ARE LOST IN THE OBLIVIAN SKY...YOU MIGHT NEED TO TRY'N INCORPORATE THEM INTO YOUR VERSE





You've got the wrong kind of RIME/Rhyme
and now you're Frozen in time,
OK...I GUESS
but that heat that VISION speaks
will defrost you're behind.
THAT IS THE WRONG YOU'RE...BUT STILL...PUNCH WAS EHH

You stumbled across a lyrical boss mr.frost,
or should i say frosty u softy, take a loss.
OK..

This wanna b stepped in front of me,
now it's slushies on the house.
HAHA...FUNNI
he ain't talkin no more.
I put a lid on his mouth.
OK
With this sick,twisted,verbalistic rhyming device.
think twice, i'm precise
and you're slippin on ice.
OK I LIKE DA VOCAB USAGE

YELLOW SNOW is you're name bi$#%
THAT IS JUST WRONG...HAHA


BREAKDOWN-THIS VERSE WAS ALOT BETTA THEN WHAT YOU ARE KNOWN TO PRODUCE...YOU HAD A COUPLE OF PUNCHES IN THERE THAT I COULD DEAL WIT...BUT YOU SHOULD MAYBE TRY'NN READ SOME OF THOSE PEEPS IN ELEVATED LINES TO TRY'N GET SOME TIPS ON WORDPLAY AND SHIT LIKE DAT...BUT BATTLE OVERAL WASN'T GOOD AT ALL...BUT OK VERSE...PEACE

nice feedback yo good critique.
much appreciated ...........................

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Voted For: VISION

I vote for Vision
structure was tight
nice play on words
and the punches kept on

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Voted For: VISION

straight up da winner rtf and vote on my battles :)

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