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What can you say to a girl with 3 kids
only 15 at this point don't know what the
real world is~~
What can you say when she travels down life's
road, unable to muster the next meal for her
young and burdened load~~
What can you say when she struggles for a
change, but cant change the fact she does'nt know
her baby-daddy's first name~~
What can you say when she wants to go
out but stuck home with the kids surrounded
by storming clouds~~

I'd say why so soon what were you thinking
closed books and open legs, now your
life is sinking~~
I'd say where is he now, did'nt he say
he cared, did'nt he tell you those special
things to get you to go downstairs~~
But no you did'nt listen to me or the person inside
your head, now you have responsibilities, and toss
and turn inside your bed~~
What can you say when they always say, it'll never happen to me
what can you say when they always
say I doubt if he'll up and leave~~
What can you say when you see the game but they're
blinded by lust not love, what can you say
when you're tired of talking, and your words seem
to be numb~~
You say well it's you not me, your life is what you paint it
but 3 years later it's 3 kids behind her, what can you
say she's tainted....

just a spare
of the moment
type thing
*~Holler~*

holla

id say show me dis girl cause i love easy pussy

nice piece--some of it was a bit typical but you stayed on topic well--the ending could have been a bit stronger but overall nice piece.

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very simple....i was kinda confuse about the first stanza where u were talkin to the reader then all of a sudden u switched ...well...it was kinda confusin but it was over all deep in a way that its from the heart ...but yeh i agree the ending couldve been better if u ended it with a quote or something that would summarize it all....

just keep doin ur thing...dont take my contructive crtitism personal but i like this piece but like i said it couldve been better...

keep droppin them verses...

coo, holler
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