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Fragant fragrance consuming me wholly
while i starve to obtain its origin;
a true historian, with false misconception.
Miss deception was working over-time
to work over time and make my trues
false and her faults mine.
An artistic adjective, linguistic laxative
that's quick and smooth but then comes the shit,
and it takes a whiff to remember the stench
of hard earned money wasted and emotion spent.
The terrible truth touches tellers of drama with fact,
that what goes around comes around
so if you look over you shoulder, your front is your back...

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had to read, and it was good man
my fav line was:
"An artistic adjective, linguistic laxative"
ever so short, yet your word play was great...got a visual on confusion and everything flippin scripts on you.
nice drop.

The alliteration added nothing and took away some sincerity... You shouldn't try so hard.

Word Id rather have it titled then not at all it just doesnt give as much feeling as a regular poem you read read in poetic scriptures on any sight would give. Anyways you tried way to hard and it was obviously exposed but still I liked your vocabulary it was well upkeeped but the imagery just wasnt there.......try less next time but good job next time title it