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KILO704 vs POETRY2aBEAT
CHECK IN BY FRIDAY OR TOPIC WONT BE GIVEN POEMS DUE BY SUNDAY EDIT YOU LINK WITH AT LEAST 2 OTHER POETRY BATTLES IN THE LEAGUE YOU VOTED ON VOTING ENDS WENSDAY AT 12 EASTERN TIME.NO LINE LENGTH AND DONT WRITE A TOPICAL THIS IS A POETRY LEAGUE I WILL DQ YOU IF YOU WRITE A FUCKING TOPICAL I HATE THAT SHIT ITS NOT POETRY :cussing:WINNERS RECIEVE 100,000 R.V SORRY NO SHOWS DONT GET PAIED YOU GOTTA ACTUALLY WIN :thumbup: GOOD LUCK TO BOTH :thumbup:
TOPIC=ODDS STACKED AGANIST YOU |
checking in, finnaly it begins
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i'm checkin in ready to win fulfillin my wishes of riches with sin....
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huh?^^ ok ill get cali to get out topic
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huh?^^ ok ill get cali to get out topic :thumbup:
dont freepost i have it |
helloooooooooooooooooooooooooooo can we get a topic please?
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ay i'm bout 2 get off tha net so and i'm goin up north 2morrow 2 visit my folks so i wont be able 2 post my shit til either late 2morrow or mondy afternoon. if thats cool. if not i'll just take tha loss.
FREEPOST AGAIN AND I WILL DQ YOU |
odds stacked against me
mystierous mystery, im shrouded in a mist of deafeat, a virctoius victory, so close but yet still out of reach, enimies embreached my front lines to the root of my seeds, the fire i add to my demons only gets hungerier when it feeds, i tried to stand up to my odds but only to rise then fall, i caint move forwrd when my backs stuck against the wall, depseration is heard when i speak for ever noun i pronounce, energy is drained from my body, red colored fluid taken by the ounce, denied by my cries for help, i have no one to help but my self, my self caint even help my self, dehidrationg from crying for help, a look into the fear in my eyes will only let you glance at my pain, i should be charged with animal cruelty for all the beasts ive slain, this time is different, my time in this time has gone to a stop, now if only grandfather time could fix my biological clock no time left in my biological clock, every tick that goes by gets close enough to stop, |
Odds Stacked Against Me a heartless hood; hundreds of niggas some two faced, some loyal,all struggling with the odds stacked against me still I rise I rise above poverty becoming a real man many hate my success out of spite for their faliures they want what I have but fear losing it as it came with the odds stacked against me i excel exceeding expectations rising to conquer all who oppose why can this not be for the entire black nation? have we not been oppressed for too long? with the odds stacked against us why must we hate? why? why i ask can we not come together for a cause to triumph above poverty and become a better people? with the odds stacked against me still I rise encouraged by those such as Malcom X, MLK, and Rosa Parks the fight for our freedom still is not over when we can walk the streets freely only shall it be complete the odds are stacked against us all because of the color of our skin however we shall prevail, some way..........we must with the odds stacked against us we must overcome unite as one brothers and sisters alike a strong nation how long must we kill each other before we realize the lifestyle of the ghetto is self-genocide with the odds stacked against me i pray for peace i pray for a better future for all who have struggled education and peace is they key; they only way out the only way to stack the odds on our side |
Wow Nicely Done Both Had Decent Structures And Both Had Decent Vocabulary......Both Had A Very Good Point Of Perspective I Enjoyed Reading Poetries Verse Coz I Feel His Since Came More Out, Like It Was More Of A True Thing Instead Of False Both Did Well But Poetrie's Verse Killed It Well Don
Poetry-9/10 Kilo-8/10 |
Vote: DeathVision (kilo704)
I felt the emotion in kilo704's drop and i related to the themes he talked bout in his drop, it was deep - jus needs a lil elevation in vocab, i like the way it didnt rhyme it seemed more natural cos of the way its like ur jus talking - 8.5/10 Poetries drop was decent nuttin particularily wrong wid it, ecept its not cool to misspell words in poetry, use a spellchecker lol j/p gd structure et etc...work on more metaphorical ways if syin stuff so people get images in their head..-8/10 RETURN THA FAVOUR |
Ok Personally I Think Poetry Had Better Emotion And Had A Better Flow To The Topic Here He Went Deeper Into The Topic Kilo Had A Decent Poem Also But The Emoption And Imagery Was Nowhere Near As Good .
Vote Poetry |
both of yall did aight on this one... but on the other hand poetry2abeats peice stuck out more to me, it had better use of immagry and a better vocab... no hate to DV cause your peice was a good one as well but i feel poetry2abeat took this one.
VOTE-poetry pc |
poetry wins closed
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