my thoughts
 

Some say prisons and gangsta's go hand in hand/
I guess for me, doing time was part of god's plan/
Im part phoenix, part devil and part man/
a deep past plus a thirst for knowledge equals smart man/
The power of the pussy is turning niggas sick/
wise men turned to fools all over a dumb bitch/
niggas rocking all your shit while in jail you rot and sit/
Well, i got something for that, its the power of my dick/
Every thug needs a lady/
but a bitch will drive you crazy/
Take your ass to court when she knows it's not your baby/
It doesnt faze me/
Im smart and im wise for my age/
But im restless like an animal trapped in a cage/
Closing on rage....mind working miles a minute/
Boys in Blue steady trying to prolong my sentence/
A lyrical demon, satan's child and verbal menace/
with a mind with no boundaries or visible limits/



Let me know what you think. If you need criticism on your shit let me know. a word for a word

I like the way it started a the rhymes were basic work on that no dick sit pick clit type stuff use more complex words it looks alot better. Like instead of

Runnin from cops tuckin a gun
Tryin to put me behind bars i'd rather run

BETTER


Blue lights and sirens break the silence in the night
Police got me steppin leapin over fences with a loaded weapon

More complex see what i'm sayin?

But i like some of th stuff you said like the 3 lines lady faze me baby good concept worded better woulda been fire but its still koo.

Keep doin ya thang stay active and check out my OM click my sig where it says Drained Emotions



By the way drop two links so this stay open... Go leave feedback on two Open Mics and copy and paste the links on the bottom of your verse. Click edit paste it in.

this was nice..multies were good and the emotion was here and there...though your content and diction was scattered but it really didnt take away from this piece right here...nice details man nice due up keep it coming!

good looking. uppin for more criticism.

I like your style till. I could use that in a Collobo Im making, get back to be in ur Interested

Good looks on the criticism. Uppin for thoughts.

i was feelin this mah dude. there was some real talk in there , that i actually had to deal wit. but you had a good flow and some decent multies in there. only thing i would say is work on your vocab...not sayin use words that are longer than the lines at the DMV, but just try to make your verse more interesting ya dig?

A lyrical demon, satan's child and verbal menace/
with a mind with no boundaries or visible limits/
^^^I was feelin ya last bar the most, i just liked it alot for some reason.
Hit me back on my shit the lnks are in the sig mah dude.......