valor vs. whitegold
 

deadlines:
battles go up sunday night around 10:00 pm eastern
check in by wedsday
verses due by thrusday
votes due by the next sunday around 9:00pm eastern
rules:
no dick riding
no crew votes
no freeposting that's what the beef thread is for if you do it here more then three times your dq'd
no feeding off of other guys verse
bar limits:
4 line min.
16 line max.

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aight valor ure rhymes are as bad as the la clippers/
i've seen better shit fall out the big dipper/
ure mom gave me a lap dance 3 times, i didn't tip her/
asked her to make out and it didn't take long before i got to stick her/
feel my beat bitch and u better fell my rhymes/
i throw as lethal punches as muhammad in his prime/
u just chill at ure computer bein a comp nerd/
this is a rap lesson that u have never learned/
told people u were dead and it made some head turns/
ure not "running out of graveyard"ure being buried under dirt/
cause it don't matter 8 wins and that u lost 2/
after this 1+2 is ure loss record now whats that equal dude/
there must be some nails in ure head thats unscrewed/
realizin u in this game, now thats screwed/
so in this battle i know that winning for u will be hard/
so take it upon ure self, make it easy, and don't start/

outta all the wack verses i found that one the most frightful.....
your lyricks are wack and never heard of,same with ''whitegold''.....

and if there was a award for wackest rookie of the month....
your nominations willl add up to having a bunch......(lmao)
this guy doesnt understand hes wack and should stop while he can.....
ill give u ur first loss like taking ur virgenity and u'll nolonger be a man....(female avytar)
come on dawg i went half ass in this verse and im still takin the victory.....
and your low profile reputation on this site will be history........

iguess what im tryin to say is for having such wack lines your ego is big....
actually your gonna have everyone laughing at you like the smileys in your sig....

blah 5 minute key

breakdown for whitegold:

flow:still kinda basic but workin better this week try and add complexity to the structure like using internal rhymes either way your improving 6/10

volcab:still on a real basic tip this is something you should look into elevating 5/10

punches:a array of played out lines nothing too personal either instead of the played ideas of momma jokes you should dig around on the board see what's he's posting make jokes from that it'll help your verse be more personal 4/10

overall:15/30 your improving keep workin on it

breakdown for valor:

flow:workin well nothing too complex but good 6/10

volcab:a step up from white gold still room to work though 6/10

punches:a few personal type lines my fav,"ill give u ur first loss like taking ur virgenity and u'll nolonger be a man...." good job here 7/10

overall:19/30

vote--valor gets my vote

ummm this is a no brainer valor gets this.....white gold some of ur rhymes went to nowhere...like u dissin his mom come on dat aint doin nothin to him....any ways valor gots this wit better wordplay and vocab
Vote=valor

Wow Valor had a way better verse wasnt great but better then this kid Lol..

V/Valor

this sucked. valor wins for that smiley in sig laughing thing. sadly, that had the most complexity in this battle. very sadly.

v/ valor.

ohh this battle was terrible....
valor- weak punches terrible flow evrything was off
you need to start coming harder
work on ya punches
overall *8*

white gold.... terrible flow terrible punches...terrible evrything...
no personals..uggghhh bad battle
my vote goes to valor for harder hitting( still not strong)
punches and better flow

5-0 valor wins