In Loving Memory
 

you came home from school n went strait to ur room lockin tha door
you went to the closet tied yourself up and was not touching the floor
Your father came in and seen ur room was locked
he broke it down seen you he was in shock
He untied you and yelled your name from the top of his lungs
Why wud you hang yourself you were so young
i found out you werent dead but most of your brain is
Were still wondering why they tryed to explain this
you went on to live for the next 16 weeks
but still you couldnt move on you own or even speak
you came out of the hospital if the middle of June
you sadly past away the 10th of july in the afternoon
We were all sad but its better in peace then always in Pain
You hung yourself once now why wud you do it again?

In Loving Memory of Kyle Clarence Mason

im feeling it, deepest condulances from me to you..

nice verse, hes prolly reading it right now

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I hope so man i miss him so much mayun too bad im not going to his funeral i wish i cud have, hes mah br0s fav cuzin so ya know hes all depressed ryte now

Man thats personal it dont matter how it looks a subject like that is ALWAYS readable sorry 4 ur loss dawg but he's watchin ya now like VA said prolly readin that verse and smilin

that was really good, sorry for your loss, but the rhyme was great, feelin that

yeah man..definatly sorry about the loss homie...keep your head up and know that he is lookin down livin life through you...keep uppin man..pz

That was dep. It got you into the piece and I felt like you were very close to this piece.

hit this up:
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=134751

that was deep seemed like u were really into it... sorry for ur loss

yo sorry for ya loss but thats was hott u were really into it and its deep real deep he prolly readin it n smilin ovah you

ill touch to it im feelin the depth im not even worried bout the rhyme scheme although it could have been a little better but i still think this was ill ..nice shit

alright verse, told a story, sorry bout the death, peace