Intermental - Twinkling Star (dedicated to my aunt...RIP Aunt Nas)
 

This song is dedicated to my Aunt Nas, she died when I was seven, one of my closest aunts, I felt I had to put it in song....

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"Twinkling Star"



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intro sounded like some disney music


after that...it was cool


I like how u have added dubbing to ur verses


lyrics were felt


flow/rhyme scheme cudda be more complex...but I feel that u were being real here

good

str8 track homie

I apreciate it dawg.......yea I know it could be more complex but it was real nah im sayin....thanks for the feed

get on msn man.

iite i hollered....yo upppp

upppin...................................

iite beat is kool.... emotion could be better for this type of track but its iite sounds lkike your trying to be angry but keeping quiet... don't worry bout your next door neighbour man jus belt it out... lyrics are nice man.... flow is pretty good.. nice track man i like it pz

apreciate that.........

upppin.........................

seems like u got a very nice flow dope beat mixed somee good emotion like te way u made ya voice in this man this may b one of ya best v good keep up

thanks..........

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* listening as i drop feed *

beat intro is real good, i like this beat

flow is kinda choppy, could be better
emotion could be better too
lyrics are nice

not a bad track, still got work to do


Pz.
INF

The beat you use is pretty good, nice slow n a nice melody. Your flow is pretty good, the fact that you really keep on story is good, emotion could be upped. But theres somin that makes me ahte the sound of your voice, its not your voice actually its somin you do to make it sound better which doesnt make it sound better to me. anyway the track is pretty good i can see your comin along well.

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