Rachel Lawrence Poem (Lots of Talent)
 

Rachel Lawrence is my friend and she is a new poem writter trying to make way. Check out this new poem.

Happy Anniversary

25 Years together
and you've barely scratched the surface
but the impressions you have made
are definitely here to stay
whether it be the things you've done
or even the things you've said
what you've accomplished
or what is still to come
everyday you excite me
knowing you two are meant to be together forever
it makes me happy knowing i won't ever have to worry
about not having both of you in my life together
through every mistake you have gained something good
first, you've raised five kids
and made it look like a piece of cake
always helping us to decide which path to take...
and what decisions to make
how will i ever be able to leave you two
start my own life
it scares me to think someday i will be gone
out of the house
out of my room
how am i ever supposed to make it through
of coarse i will
because i have learned from you
i hope someday
i can be as good as you
the continuous advice
how i should make it through
you rarely miss an event
making it to most everything
and those rare occasions you haven't been there
you need not worry
because your presence is always with me
through think and thin
loses and wins
you always tell me just what i need to hear
i wouldn't take back one second spent with either of you
because even if it was a bad second
it helped and is helping me to be the person you have taught me to be
i am so lucky to have you as my parents
without you i wouldn't be half the person i am today
words really can't express much more
or how much i care for you
and appreciate how you have cared for me
so here i go...
HAPPY 25TH
I LOVE YOU!

C'mon upp'n fo Responses

She definately has a lot of talent. Sorry you had to up this. I didn't notice it was posted.

This was good. I've tried writing and it seems easy to write something like this but when I sit down and try, it doesn't come out this good. So I can definately admire this knowing that it's not easy for everyone to do.

She expressed herself good with words. I was feeling what she said through the whole thing. And here comes all the quotes..

"first, you've raised five kids
and made it look like a piece of cake
always helping us to decide which path to take...
and what decisions to make
how will i ever be able to leave you two
start my own life
it scares me to think someday i will be gone
out of the house
out of my room
how am i ever supposed to make it through
of coarse i will
because i have learned from you"

I liked that part. Right now I'm living with my grandparents, and I feel that way about them. They're helping me grow up, if that's what you could call it. Giving me advice and all that. They've raised 4 kids and had big parts in raising their grandkids. I don't know why I'm telling this here..anyways

"i hope someday
i can be as good as you
the continuous advice
how i should make it through
you rarely miss an event
making it to most everything
and those rare occasions you haven't been there
you need not worry
because your presence is always with me
through think and thin
loses and wins"

That was another part I liked. I don't know why, I just liked it.

"you always tell me just what i need to hear
i wouldn't take back one second spent with either of you
because even if it was a bad second
it helped and is helping me to be the person you have taught me to be
i am so lucky to have you as my parents
without you i wouldn't be half the person i am today
words really can't express much more
or how much i care for you
and appreciate how you have cared for me"

And here is the last part that I liked. I definately felt this part. I wouldn't take back one second of being around my grandparents. They made me who I am, and I love them for it.

This one was very good. I like being able to read stuff like this and apply it to my life...that's why you see the crap about my life in here a lot. It helps me to feel what the writer is saying more. And I felt this one a lot. Thanks for posting it.

Wow! i am so happy that you felt that as much as i did writing it. i mean you don't understand how touched i am that you took the time to write all of that in response to one of my poems my name on thie website is whitepoet19 and i will be posting many more under that name..so in the future you can find some there. and maybe you could give me some topics you would like me to write about..and i would be very glad to try!! thanks much

you are a god writer. This one and the last.
Your style is interesting... from what I've seen it is very personal... it is difficult for many people to write good personal poems. and I've seen two good ones from you.

You are able to pick things that should be said and word them properly. It comes across as though it is being read to me by someone although I read it myself.

Nice work.
Keep this shit up.