Unrealghost vs keen2B
 

Battle Rules:

6 - 10 Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 09-03-04 at 07:09 AM

Must drop verse in 70 minutes after check in.

keen2B has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-03-04 06:04 AM.

Unrealghost has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-03-04 06:04 AM.

I come to battle/I come to do war/Iv come to pileage,leave bodies dead on the floor/UNREAL u want to fuck wit me/then go right ahead/as soon as ur finished,ima split open ur head/
with my samurai sword i keep over my bed/I keep it for emergency's like when old girlfriends try to fill me with lead/ for cheaten and sleepin with their best friends instead/so how u tryn a mess with me when im already wanted dead/ iv nothen to loose im at the very edge/ima bout to snap and break ur back/UNREAL will jesus ressurect u when u dead!

im finished mine unreal how long u goina b
it only ten lines so it shouldnt take u that long

ill do 6 lines cause thats the minimum go ahead post urs im doing mine right now

He Calls out n i accept dayum never Should-Have
makes 3 threads about me ha, i had a good-laugh

A Wack Rapper fits perfect with a Wak Name, Keen2B
Cause the fact is i own u thats what it Seems-To-Be

Ur Open Mics are shit, im surprised u wrote-it
Even if u was a master u still coudnt Promote-shyt

The Ghost just merkd u, sending Chills-down-ya-spine
i dont need skills battling u ,cuz Kill-Nouns-like-Mimes

Voted For: Unrealghost

::Breakdown::
He Calls out n i accept dayum never Should-Have
makes 3 threads about me ha, i had a good-laugh
good multi attemp.....6/10
A Wack Rapper fits perfect with a Wak Name, Keen2B
Cause the fact is i own u thats what it Seems-To-Be
personal....7/10
Ur Open Mics are shit, im surprised u wrote-it
Even if u was a master u still coudnt Promote-shyt
didnt get it 6/10
The Ghost just merkd u, sending Chills-down-ya-spine
i dont need skills battling u ,cuz Kill-Nouns-like-Mimes
good finisher....8/10

i was feelin most of you verse the style was original but everyone does it so im not gonna hate.......i liked the peronal and the finisher......u made good attempts at multi's the whole verse.....and u kept it short and sweet......
Overall=27/40

I come to battle/I come to do war/Iv come to pileage,leave bodies dead on the floor/UNREAL u want to fuck wit me/then go right ahead/as soon as ur finished,ima split open ur head/
with my samurai sword i keep over my bed/I keep it for emergency's like when old girlfriends try to fill me with lead/ for cheaten and sleepin with their best friends instead/so how u tryn a mess with me when im already wanted dead/ iv nothen to loose im at the very edge/ima bout to snap and break ur back/UNREAL will jesus ressurect u when u dead!

the reason u didnt win this battle was because u didnt come with any multis or real punch-lines.......u need them to win battles.....second reason was your verse didnt flow and it was real choppy, which means work on your rhyme scheme,third think u need to do i work on structure....not really important but u wanna represent your verse good so its easy to read......fourth and final reason why u lost is vocab.....ur not gonna win battle with basic words like hi bye guy why sigh fri my lie try even though they rhyme there simple.....some advice start reading......
24/40
Vote:Unrealghost

aight i admit my ryhme was basic
i ryhms though at least the way im readen it
u aight i need to improve more
i reckon ul take the unreal-G
i wanta battle u again though fo show

me? lol okay but maybe later on this week lol or tomorrow

ok ya thats fine
u gota crew in here by the way?

then join my crew
theres me myself and I
i want to start a crew of new people like me u in RAP VERSE
u no the up and coming
start enteren tag tournements competen against the best
that way skils will improve u no.
what u think

Voted For: Unrealghost

Unreal took this one..punches were harder,tha flow was aight,and tha was not all stretched-out...but basically UnreaL took this one is becuz he just had harder~punches than keen..