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Detrimental 09-25-04 01:51 PM

I Pray
 
--I Pray--

--Verse One--
In this life i lead, have i suffered enough?
My fathers such an ass he only comes the 1st of the month
While days keep passin us by
Watchin trouble go down in my community
Watchin these children die
Ya wonder why we smokin weed
Everdays hell and every minute of it's a struggle
Everyday's trouble with someone alwayz bustin ya bubble
No time to cuddle with so and so cuz you got someone clockin ya
Every single second anymore someones watchin ya
Everyday there's a new problem, somethin new to solve
It's funny how money is what we revolve
Not me, i can't let the evil of the money trap me
There's people makin quick money and others actin ratty
It's crappy, shit...the whole world is shitty
Got ho's tryin to get with me, no one has pity
People livin it good can't even relate
I might live life wrong but i pray for God to open the gates
To let me in, out of this whirlwind
To let me out this world of sin
I pray

--Chorus--
I pray for the Lord to let me out of this world
I try to do things right, i try to keep good morals
I try to go by um' and i try not to sin
But the devil keeps puttin me back in this whirlwind

--Verse Two--
Let me start on race and people who're racist
I can relate to this, i have room to say shit
People can't face it, the world is bad and full of racists
And what you're seein before you, the ghetto raised this
Get this, i lived a life of bein the only white kid in the projects
But what happens in this world is hard to see through these cob webs
Everything is so old and has been for years untouched
Bush fucked up and made things worse and gave me this adrenaline rush
Things are ruff anymore and people see no open doors
All they see is a life of bein poor and nothing more
Everyone can give a fuck less about the people at the bottom
They have the worst of the problems well be happy you don't got um'
I know i got um', what the fuck you think this rap about
Oh i'm just sayin this shit for fun, FUCK do i gotta shout?
Oh no shit this song has got some meaning to it
When people hear it they don't even try to do shit
They sit back on their lazy ass and wait for things to get worse
They don't care at all till they feel their next in the hearse
Oh yea sure they go pray to GOD then
But the thing is, he'll never see eye-to-eye with you again
But i still pray

--Chorus--
I pray for the Lord to let me out of this world
I try to do things right, i try to keep good morals
I try to go by um' and i try not to sin
But the devil keeps puttin me back in this whirlwind

People don't care anymore
They see the worlds racist
They see Bush is messin things up
But they don't do shit
They sit, and wonder why we losin our kids
They out there fightin for us
But fightin for somethin there's no need to fight for
Them stupid asses made the mistake and didn't elecet Al Gore
Now we have the problem with 2 president candidates
Bush and Kerry, they are never there and caring
Bush makin wars and Kerry tryin to raise taxes
People in mental hospitals goin crazy in straight jackets
People on the streets shootin each other up
But is anyone there to give a fuck?
No...the world is still racist and still has problems
Everyone soon will be livin at the bottom
Just the way things are goin
But soon this country won't be the greatest nation
Soon there won't be nothin
But i'll be there
I'll pray........

Implicit 09-25-04 01:57 PM

ay this was pretty good. looks like u put some thought into this one. good structure good flow good idea overall. i would give this a 7.5 keep doing ur thing

Detrimental 09-25-04 05:54 PM

hey man thanx.....i dunno what inspired me to write this.....it just came on to me....i'm sure somethin like that has happened to you......come on people......i need more feedback

Kawn Flixx 09-25-04 11:47 PM

nice I say about 8.2/10

I'm so damn happy theres people here talkin about real shit
and not about guns and only making diss tracks and shit
flowed nice and easy to read

we can do a collab if ya want
you see how me and senario's turned out lol

peace

Terumoto 09-26-04 12:22 AM

^word.. good shit.. you can tell it came from the heart.. good flow.. nice concepts..

7.5/10

..ADLIB.. 09-26-04 01:05 AM

nice job mate..........this was a good drop i felt it.
7.6/10

Detrimental 09-26-04 01:08 PM

hey people thanx for the feeback....i'm actually proud of this piece......somethin people actually gave me good feedback on.....thanx for the feedback......please more feedback

C.C.C.P. 09-26-04 01:35 PM

i like it good flow and very true words i give it a 7.75/10

Detrimental 09-27-04 12:06 AM

thanx for the feedback everybody.....i didn't think anyone like this....i guess i was wrong......but come on people.....i need more feedback

x-on 09-27-04 12:24 AM

Yo I felt it man, deep I like your mind I wrote a song kinda like type of level. check it out mind of vision. and the chosen what tell me what you think. And yo I think some parts you got deep then you switched you style real quick like try to stay more into it. not bad flow... overall 7/10 keep writting hommy.

one...

Detrimental 09-27-04 07:16 AM

aight i'll take a look at your shit after school today......thanx for the fed back.....come on......uppin for more feedback

Detrimental 09-28-04 04:03 PM

come on more feedback people

Speats 09-28-04 07:38 PM

yo this was so good...the lyrics are so good dude
Number One


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