surplus of wordz to bust
 

this is a re-post for BOMBATOMIK-- he dropped it awhile ago but tried to poll an open mic when he was new-- his thread was closed but he still would like some feedback

i gotta surplus of wordz to bust- i spit more than athletes//
bitchslap your cheek till you spit out cracked teeth//
gotcha momz spreadin asscheeks cuz i'm dat mothafucka//
BOMBATOMIK blow the undaground like U.S. bunker busters//
ya'll a bunch of bustas-my squad bring the ruckus//
makin the hard hits like NFL pass rushes//
more hits than rockers moshin-ya'll runnin outta options//
keep it hot when i'm droppin till you suffa heat exhaustion//
spit boxin all these dumbshits who claim they bustin clips//
when the only heat you carry is witta pair of oven mitts//
so watch who ya fuckin wit-i'll hitcha wit some rugged shit//
inflict the punishment and watch you fold like creases//
smash you to pieces wit these lyracle mastapieces//
fuck restin in peace you rest in pieces when i release this//
heat seekin- beef eatin-wac mc treatment//
thats frequently, increasingly, takin out your weak shit//

ok/.....this was not that dope....up your wordpaly and multi usage.....just some advice...this was aight...


DoPeYz.

don't get me wrong when i say this because i like the multi flow...but that seems to be the advice that it commonly handed out to everyone elses too..if everyone else all did the same thing then we'd all sound the same--where's the originality in that?

ok, flow was pretty good....vocab was good...structure was good for the most part...wordplay was pretty good too....pretty much liked most of it up untill the last 4 lines....wasnt really feeling those...overall it was a pretty good drop...

And the replies to others are where?...

let's see,, which of the many should i choose from..hmmm....i'll just put down the same ones---- just 10--bein white
Rnc---for the cause
word perfect---ultimate competition

This was quite dope..was feeling it..till the last 4 lines..then I lost interest..just keep flowing..aight..peac