$MOKESKREEN Vs. Undestrucable
 

Rules:

10 lines max
no d/r
no c/v
no h/v
3-0 is ko
blind spit
spit due 20 min afta check in
check asap
check now

chigidy check.......................................

u checkin in or what???????????????????????????????

U didn't check in but...fuck it


I’m slicin’ through ya body nigga rippin ya cartilage
Ya verse is like a sewer hole it’s flowin wit garbage
You lyrically farted I’m killin ya and just getting started
Couldn’t spit a special verse if ya yas fuckin’ retarted
Destruct the “Undestructible” my verse is physically untouchable
Dr ya ass like Huxtable from the Cosby’s turn u into a Lunchable
A comic exhibit ya style reached its limit this nigga is timid
Ban and prohibit ya wack ass life cuz aint no use to live-it
Battle me kid u gonna regret it and don’t u neglect it
You gonna take a “L” dogg remember I said it

Damn nigga, your shyt iz a bore, u rap az slow as my grandma drives//
a chance of u beatin me is like a chance for da sun don't rise//
You won 3 times straight, so its time for you ta start loosin//
Battlin me?Are you mental, jst go back to ur home da ill mental institution//
Hearin you rhyme? Is like eatin ur moms home made cinninman roll//
It sucks cuz it has no taste, so get a rap book n practice a lil mo//
Definition of $mokeScreen: White boy, 4 feet tall n has color-blindness//
If he waz eva to be rated, he'd be a 10, Oops i forgot da minus//
Your three n O, im bout to add a loss to ur record if u didn't know//
Cuz why should i even try wen dis kid raps weaker den a 3 year old//

Shyt...if you good i dunno..but i ain't even tryin

fuck nigga...i think i went to easy on you..o wellz..and why should i check in wen im da one dat created dis shyt..plus it sed check now..which means i checked..DUH!!!!how stupid can you get???ironicly this stupid

Bitch it took you about 40min's to post that bullshit...tha rules was 20min's after check in u gotta spit ya verse. If you checked in when you created the thread...then your shit was 20min's late RETARD!!!


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I’m slicin’ through ya body nigga rippin ya cartilage
Ya verse is like a sewer hole it’s flowin wit garbage
You lyrically farted I’m killin ya and just getting started
Couldn’t spit a special verse if ya yas fuckin’ retarted
Destruct the “Undestructible” my verse is physically untouchable
Dr ya ass like Huxtable from the Cosby’s turn u into a Lunchable
A comic exhibit ya style reached its limit this nigga is timid
Ban and prohibit ya wack ass life cuz aint no use to live-it
Battle me kid u gonna regret it and don’t u neglect it
You gonna take a “L” dogg remember I said it

The Dr You like Huxtable line was tight... The whole verse had a good flow but not many punchlines in it... I think the Dr line was the nices it had some good wordplay in it, and the lines before it weren't too bad, but after words it seemed like you relaxed on it.

Damn nigga, your shyt iz a bore, u rap az slow as my grandma drives//
a chance of u beatin me is like a chance for da sun don't rise//
This was kinda weak... very basic and the punch wasn't terrific
You won 3 times straight, so its time for you ta start loosin//
Battlin me?Are you mental, jst go back to ur home da ill mental institution//
I think you coulda gotten a sick line outta this but its too basic the way it is and your structure stretches.
Hearin you rhyme? Is like eatin ur moms home made cinninman roll//
It sucks cuz it has no taste, so get a rap book n practice a lil mo//
Definition of $mokeScreen: White boy, 4 feet tall n has color-blindness//
If he waz eva to be rated, he'd be a 10, Oops i forgot da minus//
This was funny- Good punch decent setup
Your three n O, im bout to add a loss to ur record if u didn't know//
Cuz why should i even try wen dis kid raps weaker den a 3 year old//
This was a good closer.... Funny nice punch

I think this verse was stronger in a couple ways- It had more punchlines that stuck... Not much wordplay but it flowed just as well as the first verse, and had a much better closer. Vote--Undestructable... Good battle yall please return the favor..
http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=125461

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hahaha..thanx....uppin 4 more votes

uppin............................................. ..........

UnDeStRuCaBlE good spit you murked him but he sory of does have a point on the check part but owell you murked him and that is all that matters
$mokescreen elevate you may be 3-0 but UnDeStRuCaBlE must be better then you cause you lost
Vote: UnDeStRuCaBlE

sorry UnDeStRuCaBlE it says i need 120 post to vote ill be back latter to vote man.
if you can return the favor link in sig

Aight...

Smokescreen: Your flow was aight! Structure ok. You had some nice punches. I especially liked your opener...your closer was kinda weak. That line with the Huxtable was really original. I also liked that verse on the "special rime".

UndestrucT: You should have came harder...you know you didn't drop a nice rime. Your structure was ok. Your opener was weaker than your close. That's were you set your precedent. I wasn't feeling ya after the opener. You had a couple of nice punches though. That minus 10 spit was the best in your verses. The rest was simple...nothing complex at all.

Close battle, but my vote goes to...

Vote: Smoke

waablo
 

both were good..but Smokey takez that 1...

Peace.

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