Neva again
Im not gon let u hit me again
Dats the last time watch i got a plan IM sick of seein bruises on top of me Im sick of seein tears run down my cheek Gain some respect and love for me All i feel is hate when your hand hit my face But the next time you hit me It aint gone be like this You gon be shock when i come back with my fist Yea rite now you think ima fool Dat im gon take it Yea rite im sick and tired of yo shit Im tired of cryin myself to sleep Then we make up you say you sorry Then you get mad and hit me again Im sick of this Im done in though with you Its over im leaving you And there's nothing you can do Cause when im walkin out All you gon do is shout Wishin i would stay But u know what im gon say.... |
hey can some1 comment on my poem
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hey this is a gud poem..... the topic is a reel one. the imagery was reel gud. the word wernt expressed in a complete matter but it was there an i i get tha jest of it
........fav part......... But the next time you hit me It aint gone be like this You gon be shock when i come back with my fist Yea rite now you think ima fool keep droppin return tha favor ( me amabu n wher i go ) ....bless |
it is a deep topic. i think u should get more descriptive with ya feelings though. i read this & feel like yeah u r tired of the abuse but not tired enough to leave.
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thx fo da comment
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good emotion i like it us betta vocab
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..............fav part............... All i feel is hate when your hand hit my face But the next time you hit me It aint gone be like this You gon be shock when i come back with my fist |
Agree with MA, most abusive relationships break-up 6 times or more before they actually end. This sounds like that. It's being mad without understanding. None-the-wiser. It's good, don't get me wrong, needs some more thought though.
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I feal you that was a great poem and a great topic
hot stuff! |
thx fo da comment
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i loved it..madd deep ma fave part:
"All i feel is hate when your hand hit my face But the next time you hit me It aint gone be like this You gon be shock when i come back with my fist" i got tha pic in ma head u kno....it almost wuz a TINA TURNER and IKE thing...lol GREAT POEM |
Great Poem! I like that and it sounds like you wrote that straight from the heart! Do Ya thing girl you'll get noticed in a big way!
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this was one of those that kinda make ya heart go out places ya know? I aint gonna sit up here and get all sentamentally so umm my fave lines was
"All i feel is hate when your hand hit my face But the next time you hit me It aint gone be like this You gon be shock when i come back with my fist" tyte ish |
I'm definately feelin that. Keep up tha good work!!
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Thats was a deep and thoughtful poem it was solidly written keep dropping cause its only gonna get better.
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