Immortal Technique Keystyle
 

I wrote a topical keystyle off of the song "point of no return" by immortal technique..the topic is....what could the point of no return be....not in the song...but in any situation..what could a point of no return be...I would appreciate feedback...feel free to leave criticisim..and feel free to drop a verse on what another point of no return may be



this is the point of no return I can never go back/
a life of freedom traded, my life is fadin to black/
an Impossible obstacle is nothing but responsibility/
My plans are ruined, regardless of my true ability/
I guess I'm helpless because i couldn't help myself/
If i was more selfless I might of protected myself/
But I made a mistake now I put my goals on the shelf/
I might as well throw them away for I will never see them again/
the way i feel I could only hope to explain/
Knowing I can't back out, aborting is out of the question/
Fucked because I took out my agression on a 30 minute session/
now a few months later all I'm seein is progression/
nothing could prepare me for this moment, i should of ran away/
it's too late now I have my dues to pay/
I guess theres still a chance for me to book, I'll take that into consideration/
I contemplate bein on my own and it fueled my angry sensation/
How could I do to another what was once done to me/
I grew up in a song but could never sing on key/
fuck it, do onto the world as the worlds done onto you/
thought about it some more figured thats what I would do/
but than i found something out, something that would change me forever/
the woman I cared for told me she'd love me through whatever/
how could I leave her with the responsibility that I helped create/
i started to cry, feeling My love come from hate/a few months later, my responsibility was finally here/
looked into it's new blue eyes and asked "what did I fear?"/
now I know this is the point of no return i can never go back/
how could I turn away from the Only two that would ever love me back?/

7 views no feedback..thats complete bullshit

uppin just in case anybody might want to leave feedback...

errr...you seem real so Im gonna be real to you....It was a decent drop,don't get wrong, but I just seen this spit so many times in so many different forms....thats the thing that's bittersweet bout open mic:no matter how original you may think your spit is...more than likely someone else has done it....



But I was feelin it....the structure was pretty good...no hitches in it


my fav part?


How could I do to another what was once done to me/
I grew up in a song but could never sing on key/
fuck it, do onto the world as the worlds done onto you/
thought about it some more figured thats what I would do/
but than i found something out, something that would change me forever/
the woman I cared for told me she'd love me through whatever/
how could I leave her with the responsibility that I helped create/
i started to cry, feeling My love come from hate/a few months later, my responsibility was finally here/
looked into it's new blue eyes and asked "what did I fear?"/
now I know this is the point of no return i can never go back/
how could I turn away from the Only two that would ever love me back?/
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pretty straight man...I can see you spittin with emotions...thats what makes it decent...if it wasn't for that....I probably wouldn't have even left a reply...but keep doin you fam.



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it was pretty good i was feelin it for real...........................................

yeah I'm kinda new to this..and I'f been startinto figure out....Originality isn't original anymore..you have to dodge some ideas because people thought of them before you..anyways...i really appreciate the feedback...thats what I was lookin for..thanks Homie...2 fingas one love

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Not bad, You flowed nicely, but it isn't the most original but you did good. I like. So check me out jaded typestyles Im new here too. :thefinger