my first spit
 

it's been awhile i've been in the lab now i'm ready to ~attack~
all you niggas on my list so start runnin like you on ~track~ cus i'ma have my ~pack~
with me so watch ya ~back~//1

you niggas thought i was hiddin think again i was ~trainin~ and ~regainin~
my strength preparin for the ~pain~ to comeback hardcore to the ~brain~//2

i'm frustrated with you niggas always kickin me ~down~ to the ~ground~
i felt like i was a disrace to what i ~surround~ but now i improved so watch me ~astound~//3

i'ma retaliate with my ~army~ better think twice before you ~disarm me~ take a look at
ya nigga that tried to ~harm me~ i showed him leather face before the ~alarm G~//4

better be cuatious when you hear me ~rap~ it's equivalent to a death ~trap~
ya body will be parolized and ~collapse~//5

i'll admit it i ain't black or~white~so don't look for me cus i'm outta ~sight~
i must be ~invisible~ cus i ain't even ~visible~ in the~bright~light~//6

this is my first post so plz give me some suggestions

can anyone give me advice on my verse

nope, shits pretty much garbage...umm just freestyle

dont put those squigly lines ~

That Invisible line had potental but you just used it wrong try switching it up

it wasn't too bad just work on it and keep tryin'....practice makes perfect

keep elevatin, don't use ~word~, ~word~

annoying!, lol

damn... took my comments... (freeposting to look like a vet)