new song....jesus above the influence
 

jesus above the influence.wma - 2.34MB

http://www.zshare.net/download/687441268353854e/

beat by beats4legends

not sure why its wma and not mp3 when i exported it from my program it said mp3 but now its wma??????? i think its z share....its worth the download though......................

1st link
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=250949
2nd link
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...619#post3283619
and left feed on just about every other song on the site return the favor

uuuuppppppiiiiiiinnnnnnnn

took for...EVER to download this...

beat is ok...nothing to bob too...but fit the vibe of this track

good quality lyrics..and your rhyme sequences were nice in spots


however, your delivery/flow on the hook, esp., sounded clunky to me...

otherwise...def. potential





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bump, bump, bump...


...the supe

uppin for feedback.............

You think you can throw it somewhere like usershare or something? zhsare seizes up my comp whenever I try to download something from there, thanks in advance.

i think this should work....
http://usershare.net/kl8ni2rhuvsm .......

jesus above the influence.wma - 2.3 Mb

http://usershare.net/kl8ni2rhuvsm

not sure why it wont just play and makes u download it?

didn't even grasp that toxic/talksic play till i heard u say it.
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theres a lot more subtle ways to go about sayin what you're saying so people would listen to it with out feelin being preached at, i have that problem sometimes too. the hook is too straight forward, but the lyrics in verses are pretty dope cuz i think i agree wit most of it. but if u don't agree with all those things there should be some common ground you should touch on with people. jay-z says core emotions, but u should talk how the thinkgs u talk about effect people negatively and how.
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and just from a rap point of veiw you want to say what you are saying in as few words as possible to make it flow better. you should try to cut out as many little words as possible while keepin the main point in the bar to make it flow better so u dont sound like u are tryin to fit too many words in, or u need to speed your flow up or sumin.

^^^^word right on, i see what your saying about putting to many words in my bars.
and u made a good point by saying if they dont understand how it effects them or if they dont agree with it then there not gonna relate,or they just wont agree.so i need to go more in depth about it.and i could see how it would make people feel like their being preached at and agree..thanks for the feedback.

uppin for feedback........................................

I want to check it out but useshare.net gives me viruses my scanner picks up trojan attacks from it.

I guess I came too late... all those links are dead.