My deepest Love
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my inner self behold secrets of love
the city in me I keep it drugged like a Los Angeles street luggin heavy feelings in tears you've been gone 4(for) 6 years out of reach so in fear I'm tuggin at a higher plan a reason from higher judgement to keep these memories below me bestow me you surround me with tsunami's cover my L.A my ocean need a latitude adjustment I'm strugglin in my own water I strangle in confusion and anger you rise a liquid angel your so beautiful the water subsided my city turn 2 silver and gold no longer black and coal like atlantis with earth rearranged we're one at home baby you changed me |
I focused myself to write this more in a hip hop style rather than in pure poetic form. I hope that helps in getting the most out of what I'm trying to say.
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This was good. Nice dedication to your love. Love does seem to change people. Either for the good or for the worse. But I liked this. It was sweet, the flow was good, and so was the vocab. Overall, I liked it, good job.
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This is very...sweet (yeah, not the best word to use..but still).
It struck some chords. Very personal and just had a kind of 'elevanted innocence' to it. ..resp... |
hey just enjoy, its not personal at all. The message I'm giving is that I am the city and my gf is the ocean. She gives me tough love 2 make me see who I really am so I can change. hence the city turning into silver and gold. Just 2 tell u what it means going by how I wrote it.
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I liked this a lot. It was short and sweet and you really got the message of love out. Keep writing, you have a nice style.
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