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"The Storm" OSB and Drakel
OSB = Purple Drakel = Blue Witness a mastermind... and a relic's mixture, Drakel and OSB... always dispersing angelic scriptures... Skies begin to swell up, thundering commotions, Heavens crying down with purifying emotions, Mother nature still cares, a suprizing devotion, But better head inside, cause theres a storm in motion... open my dome, it isnt a bother, so come take a peek in my zone this is home, here, unique is grown, watered with techniques unknown sprouting harmonic flowers, showering blessings to exposed eyes outing any chronic cowards attack, empowering closed minds and suppose i, just for a moment, with-hold lies and froze time show why i grow alive everytime i write and compose rhymes i solely climb, and slowely find out the base of my style all the while my happiness compiles from other faces with smiles just a glimpse, clenched fists, your thoughts re-trace life's file one pitch and ya see it, music's warm embrace lifts spirits from the pile but admist the vile hostiles, i'll spit truth with words that inspire to write fire for the youth, you're sure to see its my preferred desire it wont expire, sending satisfaction even to those who dont admire your reaction will grow with my flow cause the winds here only blow higher so come and reside, inside my world, entry is free, no required attire collide with my eyes and agree i provide any skill you've tried to aquire i know im not perfect, but every new stride i glide closer to the light connect with the tide, taking notes while listening to the ocean recite Storm approaching blowing leaves... Absorb the ocean's flowing breeze... Towards the slowly growing trees... Roared the motion of the seas... Broadening horizons because as times passes passion fades, Drawing suprising images lyrically with an everlasting page, Following the skie's clouds hoping to unmask the rays, And bottle its spry movements before its unbasked and grey, Following cries to a man whos denied his statures great, Swallowing dry, walking along with a poets everlasting rage, Not bothering sly actors whos only goal is to pass the trade, Just continue splashing accuracy passionately like crashing waves, Choosing to light my path before ever it goes black and strays Moving the sight to uncloud my vision without lack in faith, Proving I'm right, obscure brightness isn't a viewable light, Like sun off a glacier, moving sluggishly but a beautiful site, Poetic genius writing sentences as well as leading the movement, I'm not concieted... Every single line I'm seeing improvement, Needing to prove it? Our creation is causing the ground shaking, Tectonic plates cracking, snapping, collapsing the foundation, Ground breaking lyrical wizardry, rain has fell from skies, Literally... The storm is approaching..... Drakel and I... Feedback left |
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I will leave real feed tomorrow, but WOW |
man OSB, here's what i liked the most about your piece, the lines
Proving I'm right, obscure brightness isn't a viewable light, Like sun off a glacier, moving sluggishly but a beautiful site, Poetic genius writing sentences as well as leading the movement, I'm not concieted... Every single line I'm seeing improvement, Needing to prove it? Our creation is causing the ground shaking, Tectonic plates cracking, snapping, collapsing the foundation, Ground breaking lyrical wizardry, rain has fell from skies, Literally... The storm is approaching..... Drakel and I... ^ flowed so good, and awesome image, shit this was awesome, crazy piece man. well done. bolded one was the best, just so good |
i solely climb, and slowely find out the base of my style
all the while my happiness compiles from other faces with smiles ^That was so great, loved it so come and reside, inside my world, entry is free, no required attire collide with my eyes and agree i provide any skill you've tried to aquire ^Oh man... That second line was amazing... i know im not perfect, but every new stride i glide closer to the light connect with the tide, taking notes while listening to the ocean recite ^dope closer too... whole verse was great I swear dude... This is the most beautiful, angelic peice i have ever read. I'm not being egotistical... This is fucking dope. Your shit flowed so good. You + Me = 10/10 in my opinion.. |
10/10 in my book the flow wsa on the vocab was off the chain.. just one of those rare perfect pieces i'd say.. def worth a nom in the piece/om of the month and or year... cuz it was yes just that dope.. keep it up nice work ...my favorite lines
"one pitch and ya see it, music's warm embrace lifts spirits from the pile but admist the vile hostiles, i'll spit truth with words that inspire to write fire for the youth, you're sure to see its my preferred desire it wont expire, sending satisfaction even to those who dont admire" that was some dooooopeness right there... werd to both.. |
amazing piece, this shit was fire. im gonna have to create a new word for this type of collab. VOCAB-U-FLOW...most of the time an artist leans toward vocabulary, they fuck up the style or flow of the verse. and when an artist focuses on flow, they completely skip any undilization of vocab. but that was not the case here. the vocabuflow was hot. trust. good read. some bars were hard to comprehend the first look through, but the second was clearifying. hot shit, no doubt. but yall forgot one part...you didnt ask eph to jump on the verse. haha, just playing yall. very impressive. most def a nomination for something respective. im out. be easy.
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This was a very good piece by both of my OG brethren i think yall came with good emotion... and your verses actually made the whole piece come together into one whole om rather thn two random verses put together...
OSB: Poetic genius writing sentences as well as leading the movement, I'm not concieted... Every single line I'm seeing improvement, ^These two lines stood out for me very well put and also very true your improvement is obviously seen throughout your om's.. Drakel: it wont expire, sending satisfaction even to those who dont admire your reaction will grow with my flow cause the winds here only blow higher ^Imagery ...very nice i felt this verse the most it shows your very decriptive imagery in your piece.. Overall 9.1/10 :thumbup: , Good Job Guys |
This def a nice read
OSB: Proving I'm right, obscure brightness isn't a viewable light, Like sun off a glacier, moving sluggishly but a beautiful site, Beautiful simile + visual Soooth flow some subtle multis that def helped it flow smoooth Drakel i know im not perfect, but every new stride i glide closer to the light connect with the tide, taking notes while listening to the ocean recite Nice way to finish ur verse Also some nice flow Overall an enjoyable read . respect Please return the favour in the form of a vote in my sig |
Wow, where do I begin??
Kesse: By far the best that I've ever seen from you. Great use of vocab and imagery. Emotion was great. OM of the year right here IMO. it wont expire, sending satisfaction even to those who dont admire your reaction will grow with my flow cause the winds here only blow higher Best line in your verse in my eyes, but everything was great. OSB... Damn dawg...Nothing short of what I could ever expect from you. You are one of the most talented people on this board, and I feel that you do not get the recognition that you truly deserve. Emotion was great and everything was in place. I can't even pick out your best line... It was that sweet! |
Good shit as always from OSB. I haven't seen a single piece I haven't liked.
And Drakel, another awesome piece, even though I've only read a few. 10/10 in my books. |
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Damn...
I'm just speechless: how both of you managed to portray such a strong imagery combined with emotion throughout complex vocabulary yet kept an excellent flow...too crazy for words! Excellent concept which you worked out in an interesting, fascinating way and both of your styles came together into a very nice piece. Read it again and again and again and it becomes more powerful each time I read it. Definitely open mic of the month right here! Dopeness defined... |
barndoor!!!!!!!
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