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My Confession (Open for Collab)
My Confession Life tought me to live but the lesson is constanly under question I'm constantly delt with depression that resorts to aggression Self hatred beating myself up thats how my time is spent Tryin to keep my chin up but it feels like cement You see the boy with the happy expression Little do you know its a mask for depression Go ahead say it, I'm a phony a fake But I don't wana reveal that inside I'm lonely and ache Emotions bottled up so much that I can fill a keg Countless nights without sleep I pray and beg Runnin from problems but only getting closer to the next Bein chocked by this rope life is tight on my neck My heart is a mess remove my shirt and feel the scars on my chest Emotions are locked up in it call it cardiac arrest I don't need pity I'd rather have you be real There is no compassion when you don't feel like i feel I'm surounded by people yet I feel so excluded You hear my story but if you only knew it (Hook x2) Tryin to keep it in but I'm no longer able No more hiding its all on the table I'm not who you think you got the wrong impression Wana know the real me? Then here's my confession Holla if you wana collab and add to this LINK #1 http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2702173 http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post2706814 |
i like this it was good and good words good phrases it was pretty tight keep it up for real aight
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Man you already know how i feel about the deepness in ya rhymes. This was pretty dope right here. Excellent use of vocab. Got what you need to say across very fluidly. Keep up the good work man. 9/10.
RTF on another one my OM in my sig. Also Im down for a collabo if ya interesterd. |
Thanks Dolla and yea definitly down for a collab PM your verse to me and we'll repost it as a OM also know anybody else who got deep OM's so we can get 3 verses?
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Give me feedback and i promise i'll return the favor uppin...
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aye Paper View this was a nice piece right here; i think we can all relate to this theme. i was really feelin the line "My heart is a mess remove my shirt and feel the scars on my chest. Emotions are locked up in it call it cardiac arrest." good multie and metaphor. i thought that the rhyme scheme in lines 3/4 (expression/depression) got repetitive with lines 1/2 (question/aggression) though..but yea nice drop 8/10
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this was a Nice piece u really caught my attention with the use of words and stayin on topic nice
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this was a pretty nice drop..you had nice emotions and very good feelin , the only thing that i really wasnt feeling was how short it was makes it seem like you ran out of words to say ..but other then that it was a really good and deep drop ..keep it up
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