$~hot freestyle~$
 

A soldier ready for war, grenades all pinned out/
You'll get the guage to spray if you make it pissed now/
Place you face-to-face so, you can taste the shit now/
Lay you face-down and tie you up from ankles to wrists down/
Ain't no sucker-punchin' me, I stay with my fists out/
This place is filled with pussies, so I'll make these fish drown/
Your depicted a clown, so the shit these MC's are spittin' now/
is shit that could have them seriously injured, teeth and chin down/
In the ground, But I know all this bull-shit, beef, bickers, and bouts/
all lead up to teach us, but we suck cause we havent figured the shit out/
So it's about time you actors get Edwards Scissors to cut the act-in-half/
Have his hands attack a man, my bad if that were to damage ya plans/
but only the strong survive, none of the faggots last/
Everything you want you gotta' grasp and grab it fast/
'cause no one knows when that man's gunna' snatch it back/
But if it resorts to me havin' to grab a gat 'cause fag's mad I rap/
I will gladly stand, give it all away and hand it back/
Ha, I have to laugh, Cause why would I work my ass off/
to give up, get hurt fast and fall, how could I manage that?/
All the bull-shit you wanna' continue wit', that plan is scrapped/
I'll expand fast and have van's packed with man's strapped/
ready to blast at anyone, whoever can't adapt/
Most times, I don't even have to battle cats/
Cause I ask myself where's the damn challenge at?/
My habits have made me spit crazy and advantage passed/
wack-rappers cause they can't stand how I'm rappin' and/
not spittin' average raps. A savage man, you'll get chewed up/
This dude's stuff is screwed up enough/
that it will have you ruined and junk/
You useless and stupid and fuck; So go and spit that fuckin' fluid up/
I'm the Undisputed punk/
I'm on my own nuts on this one, Turn that mutha'fuckin music up/

gimme som feedback on how to improve

i liked that you put some long shit up here.......

but you need to work on ryhmes.....

thanx keep em comin

i was feelin it nice vocab a 7 in my book

dat was trash

yo, when I speak, its unique,
when you leak, I critique,
then you freak, and you tweak,
cuz your skills, are so weak,
then my help, you come seek,
cuz im skilled, lyrically,
try to check, n' I'll deke,
just dont talk, shut ya beak

some people, dont like me,
wit words, cammon fight me,
instead, they indite me,
I dont take, that shit lightly,
I'll let slide, but just slightly,
attack, day and nightly,
cocky? I might be,
fuck you, just bite me

evree-one, one-on-one,
to the top, I'll take on,
until all, yall gone,
and the title, i won,
wanna battle? cammon,
until up, come tha sun
this rap shit's, so fun,
this flow, is now done