2 tracks. Please peep, critique
 

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/9/ijllyricmusic.htm
PLease say which one your critiquing. Both would be dope. ;)
Both a collab with me and UnderRated

* Listening *....Beat Is Ehhh...Ok...first guy Flow Is Not That Great..Its Like U Tried 2 Hard...But U Catch Up During The End....U Need More Emotion Man..U Dont Seem Hyped Up...Voice is So-So...Second Guy....Ya'll Sound Alike...4 Real...First Guy Flowed A Little Bit Better...Quality Isn't That Great....Beat Really Don't Fit This Topic...

Overall...I Give This Track a 7/10...Props Homie...Stay Up...

And If U Could..Check Out My New Song 47 Popstars....

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111395

Feedback..Much Appreciated...Thanx

One Luv Ya'll...

~KJ~

^which one did ya peep?^ thanks for lookin at it man, appreciate it

Struggles...i think that was the name....

yea...pretty coo man...

check minez out...

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111395

One Luv...

~KJ~

listenin to struggles... quality is real bad..flow was tight. lyrics were sick, lyrics were koo.. but if u upped ur quality, this shit will be more ill than it is... nice shit man..

thanks..workin on the audio quality...uppin

feedback?

peeping struggles

dont like this beat...tooo bland
qaulity bunz, flow is good, sometimes too fast so i cant hear what you saying
delivery feel at the end of ya verse, you get boring
second dude, mumbles too much...i gotta strain to hear what he saying
overall, i aint feel this, but yalls flow is good, just need some emotion, pronounciation and qaulity help...
pz

thanks, up....I know the sound quality isn't the greatest, I'm to broke to buy a good mic

come on guys

feedback?

please?

listened to underrated diss track.
i dont know man. flow seemed extremely basic....same thing over and over....emotionless......shit didnt connect cleverly...had some basic multis in there. seriously work on the delivery of your rapping.
i dunno. wasnt really feeling it.

just listened to struggles.
lyric your whole verse about "the struggles in your life" is about RB...
seriously work on the DELIVERY. ahhhh

the underrated diss

well the beat is pretty good and you got a good flow that goes with it but your missing the emotions, the tone isn't there, i can't feel you on that one men.....sometimes your russing too much and losing the flow..........got some nice rimes at places but others are poorly though about......anyways keep up and don't give up men......

PIC
peace