L.I. vs. lock(topical match)
 

deadlines:
battles go up monday
check in by wedsday
verses due by thrusday
votes due by sunday
rules:
no dick riding
no crew votes
no freeposting that's what the beef thread is for if you do it here more then three times your dq'd
no feeding off of other guys verse
bar limits:
16 bar min.
32 bar max.

topic:you can have one wish what is that wish and why?

checkin in and nice topic. gonna be hard

ahh topical....my specialty...checkin in....good luck lock....hope this ish is a hot battle....by the way nice topic....

I've been granted the miracle to have whatever I desire...
Only one choice so its tough when there’s so much I admire...
Girls, Money, Cars, and all that other shit we worship…
I can fix any of my problems with this and get a grip…
Or like my mom says I can give back to the community and do something good for once…
Than again I can impress the girls wit a wish for the ride I’ve wanted for the last few months…
Gotta breakdown my choices and draw it out before I make a decision…
Found myself factoring out wishes as if it were simple division…
Not the car or the girls cause that shit can be earned on my own…
Money would be nice to get my family out the ghetto and in a home…
Decided to consult this shit with my mom and have her input…
I need this to be the best wish possible to get started off on the right foot…
Told me that its my decision and that its all up to me…
Got no help at all from her so I talked to my boy Free…
He told me the same deal and that I should pick sumtin that will help in the long run…
And will have positive effect on me and bein able to look back and say that I won…
Still no help so I talked to my grandma on the phone…
Same answer, guess my choice will neva be known…
I don’t wanna blow this chance so ima give it another day to reflect…
My dad was lost in a shooting, maybe I could bring him back…
Nope can’t bring back the dead, so scratch that thought…
Scratch the money idea cause happiness cant be bought…
This shit getting down to the wire like im kanye west…
No one else gets to make this decision, im truly blessed…
Now’s the time for my wish to me submitted…
I don’t wanna be the only one who benefited…
For once I listened to my mom and followed the advice she gave me…
To stop thinking about myself and start givin back to the community…
Got the street cleaned up and the projects all fixed…
No more broken windows, no violence, all races are mixed…
The church has been rebuilt and this all happened because of me…
All this good came from one wish, haha imagine if I had three…

TO BE CONTINUED….

wishin for 1 thing aint good enough for me/
if I had 1 wish Id probably wish for 3/
I want it all from dough to true hollywood storys on e/
or the mental things in life most of us cant see/
most cats a wish for bags of weed for free/
theyll either sell it or smoke it to get high and skeed/
and they the same people without there own house but tree/
and livin wit there momma but wont give her a rent fee/
enough wit the daydreamin let me give u my 3 wishes/
id wish for 10 million bucks to get me from rags to riches/
and i aint talkin bout rudolf when he bliztes/
i would pay the president to kill the cock roaches in my kitchen/
wouldnt have free insurance so i have to pay for my own stiches/
and i wouldnt spend a dime on the hoes and the bitches/
for my second wish id wish for the biggest house in america/
most of ya probably thinkin why but it aint that histarical/
for my last wish id probably wish for ten more/
not big houses but wishes thats when id spend it on hores/

ran out of time but heres mine.

this have GOT TO BE THE WEAKEST TOPICAL EVER
And the topic was easy as shit
you guys suck
seriously
anyway
I vote for L.I.
Although he claim that topical are his specialty
he sucked
but his verse was better than Lock's
It seemed like L.I. put more feeling in his verse
and that's what got him the win
Vote/L.I.

1 fuckin vote...come on!!!!

breakdown for L.I.:

flow:alittle off in spots in the middle of the verse but for the most part good job 6/10

volcab:good use worked through the verse helped some of the imagery well too, 7/10

story:it was good you stayed on topic the whole thing and it was pretty orginal kinda predictable though i'd of liked to see more twists and turns but good job none the less 7/10

overall:20/30

breakdown for lock:

flow:striaght basic but no off spots good job 7/10

volcab:pretty basic i'd expect alittle better then this 5/10

story:pretty much a usually story you'd expect to come along with this topic nothing special try harder in this department next topical 5/10

overall:17/30

vote--good battle pretty close but my vote is for L.I.

2-0 L.I. wins this