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Lil C 08-30-05 12:48 PM

~much~
 
hey its been a min since ive been on here lol; well heres a piece i wrote while i was on vacation; hope yall enjoy

See Its Kinda funny...
The first time I met you...
I didn't think about you twice.
Your friend had my eyes occupied.
I ignored the word on the street...
That you wanted me, and you had plans on gettin' at me.
But the second time around...
Things were so much different.
I remembered you...
I had become distant in your mind.
Yet you approached me...
Like a man.
The feeling we both felt...
Unbelievable.
Some call it love at first site.
Instant connection is a better fit.
Sitting there just gazing...
Leaves us with the feeling of the ultimate conversation.
Your living'n'loving the single life...
While im tied holdin' down my Wifey title.
I've neva been the one to cheat...
But you just cant be beat.
Your style is fly..
Your game, there is none.
You say what ya feel, do what cha think is right.
Got our heads all twisted up.
You dodge'n ya boyz, me ignore'n phone calls...
Just so we can be alone.
Your family adores me..
Lil'sis callin' me Sis, lil'bro Crushin on my rear...
And your mom....Callin me just to make sure im okay.
But in a sense we both known its wrong...
Your not ready to be tied down to....One.
And I, not ready to call it quits with "Him".
Yet we keep at it...
Callin' each other daily...
Makin plans to see each other.
We gotta stop...
Gotta let go...
We're not ready...
It would be too much.
Even tho we both want it....
Could we possiblely want it too much?
Craving each other, while trying not to cross The Line...
Stop!
Stop!
Stop!
Stop!
We gotta be strong...
Accept that we can't.
Can't do This....

chip 08-30-05 02:42 PM

i know about the line........... *smiles* solid piece, good emotion, best poems seem to be the ones from personal experience...... your's is almost like a memory..... tryout for poetry at TTI......... we can alwayz use another poet.... overall 9/10 keep em comin.......

oh, since u forgot a link, and u posted feedback on my piece i figured i'd help u out:
^^his link:http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=202397

fluidmoon 08-30-05 06:51 PM

Great poem, emotion was there, very real, thats what i like about it, seemed like an experience and situation that readers can relate too, keep em coming.1

Lil C 09-01-05 01:42 PM

thanx fo da feed u guys; lol n thanx fo da link chip; already tried out pa


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