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TK vs Sane
Topic: Broken condom :hump:
Check in Due 25 September Verse due 28 September 20 line Min 40 line max |
LOL @ broken condom, that is by far the classiest topic i've ever been given. You jus did that cause you know im nasty.
Check. G'luck Sane. |
word I knew you two would enjoy this topic, so many fucked up things you could write about.
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Ahahahahaha man...
Funny topical here we go. |
'The smooth glide of the body is turnin me on baby! Shut the fuck up Col-B before I turn you into a true lady!' 'Oh please Ysdat, why the hell would you do that girl? I'll take out my penis and shoot white blanks that go blat blat blat!..werd' 'Ohhh baby, you turning me on you better quit now ho bird,' 'Shut the fuck up baby, cuz I'm about to blow all over, werd. Two lovers interwined in love at first sight, as it took flight, Making love in every hole they could find all fucking night. 'I'm gonna make you feel the cool feel of my dick, get ready, Cuz you're gonna love me more then leady loves cake, get me?' 'Ooooh ya, I love your ass, keep it comin in that new zealand tone, I love you more then Claudia, even though I don't even talk to you on the phone. But High Dro knows the truth, but he also knows to stay quiet... pearl, Or else I may throw my blind glasses and bitches go and riot, werd' 'You got a condom? Oh well who cares we are down under anyway, Quit running ho, you ain't goin anywhere and you can't get away. I'll show you the true meaning of the down under style babay.' 'Werd? Well direct it to my eyes, I've heard you cure the blind big bird, And though I like bondage, bein able to see helps too, werd.' Again they make love, but this time something magical happens, The spic is saying some shit that doesn't deserve a english interpretation El Oh me coge un bebé más duro, amor de la maldición I ese dick en mi cara Don't even translate that, or else you're as gay as that spicca. 'Ohh shit the condom broke, what we gonna do big bird? I don't need anymore diseases, my girlfriend was bad enouh..werd' Well turns out Ysdat had more diseases then a hospital for aids, He's failed more tests then a retarded kid in fuckin 12th grade. Sane tells the story, same ending both fucked up the ass what now? Guess Ysdat goes back to jail, and the spic gets to eat more dog chow. It's a crime and shame, that his game is that lame, what to rhyme? Bump and grind, I guess even a blind spicca gets a nut at some time. |
I bet I get DQed for this.
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Rrrrrrrrrrrrrooooofffffffflllllll!!!!!!!!!
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LOLOL
Like the story line, but that was situation where the condom broke at the end, lol, so you ain't really do tha topic... delete this if you think im 'swayin' votes, but shiit, i'll write somethin up on the topic at hand.. |
Alrite, somethin quick, does the job...
Body heat pours thru eachother, drippin sweat.... 'Baby, Go baby go, no, don't pull out yet'... Feelin, that drives man's pride keeps you inside... Almost sure paliside and fricition collide... Barrier breaks, sprains a leak.... You ain even kno, and suddenly hit ya peak... Her eyes widen, dazed in confusion..... Mutually hopin that was a tangiable illusion.... *pulls out* -REALIZATION- Minds thrown for a loop, future seems clouded... Emotional preperation, life may get a lil crowded... Sensual feelin, locked down for 18 years... Pregnancy shouldn't even be the worst of your fears.... When you got more stds avaiable then hotmail addresses.... No idea the power she now possesses...... Atleast 50 percent everythin you've earned... To be daddy, clinic results showin you been burned... Chylmidia, Herpes, Hep B, God Why Me? Gonorrehea, HPV, oh God please don't Be HIV..... *Realization Verse, May be Repetitive, ment to do that, to set up what you actually be feelin. |
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Ok, see here's the thing dude, I made a story about the condom. So woot I followed it. They are both fucked up because of that, if you talk to them enough you'd get it. The condom breaking fucked them up as people. |
i'm going to vote tk's because i thought sane's was just entirely retarded. by technicallity you did create a topical because of the storyline ... but in my opinion blatant attempts at humor cheapens the topical aesthetic - just seems like you didn't take it seriously.
vote - tk |
Broken Condom...
I assumed we both were goin to write funny stuff. And topicals don't have to be serious all the time, you gotta have fun some time. So ya, it's suppose to be what topical you enjoyed more, not who can say the most vocab in 30 lines. |
really? nice outlook ... too bad i think you lost so that's how it is.
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Your choice, but don't start acting like a bitch cuz I decided that I didn't want to do somethin serious this one time and I don't think that topicals should be depressing all the time.
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Hmmm, ain no hate it homie, topicals are based on visualization... I completely understand where your topical was goin, but jus I unno...
Good lookz on the vote Atticus.. Uppin' |
sane - first off, he hsant bitched yet, you have. also the only funny thihng about it is was koolcolb saying werd at the end of all his sentences, which though true, made way for some incredibly forced rhymes and made the piece look sloppy. it wasn't original either, and wasn't very comical.
tk - good vocabulary ,and what you were shooting for, the emotional pangs, was hit more than what sane shot for, the comedy.. better imagery, and mechanics were good as well v- tk |
Ya, he's trying to say I'm degrading topicals, to me, that is bitching and insulting. He's complaining that I didn't do something serious and act depressed cuz the condom broke and now there's a kid. I mean, Atty is acting like by this topical, I have just made topicals a joke and that I am disrespecting what I do daily.
Topicals = songs unrecorded So don't start saying that topicals are based on one thing, because what truly makes a topical is the enjoyment of the reader. If you didn't like it, fine. I'm not a stand up comedian anyway, but don't start telling me what a topical is like I'm some kid who just started writing. A topical brings imagination, and I am willing to bet everyone who's read this imagined Ysdat and Col-B doin whatever I said. What I wrote, though not great, is still a topical and by no means makes fun of what I write, it's suppose to make you smile and laugh. So stop acting like this topical was suppose to be an essay of a broken condom and get the dicks outta your ass and try smiling. I don't care if I lose, cuz that just makes me write better. Good job TK and good luck. |
No point in explaining, but yea it ain over yet homie..
but I don't agree with 'Topical = Unrecorded Song' But anyways 2-0 uppin |
when did i say it had to be depressing? a broken condom is basically the start of a new life ... which, in no way is entirely depressing. depending on whether you created an adult or adolecent character you could have made a very uplifting and pleasant piece of love and welcoming, which would be concidered a serious piece. it doesn't take a slit wrist to create art ... but whatever, i'm not going to argue it anymore. odds are you'll lose as you should and that'll be it from you, later days.
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dude it wasn't funny in the least. its been done so many times, and maybe the best topical head out there made it funny. it just doesn;t make many people laugh. |
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Ya, it is. I didn't put anything what people want to hear in the verse, so it's over. Good luck. |
Till the third vote comes in for me, it's not over.
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Sane, Whats up with that, Dont you drop harder agaist ahhem" Harder Opponents"
I thought the concept was funny but the actual topical was not, Vote: Tk For actully giving a fuck, Nice try at creativity tho, this time it really dident work in your favor |
Good Lookz on the vote 3-0
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LMMFAO
what tha fuck iz this shit?? *dead* u crazy spicca, lol, werd |
Shut the fuck up.
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nut the fuck shut. man I shoudl really get to PMing flashy light and tell him this is finished.
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I love how everyone is still offended to what I did.
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