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I'm War
I gotta 4-5th, nope
Nope I gotta 2-5 (can't boost) Too-wide your-eyes when my bullets nose dive...(atcha face) No lie, for why My clip is holdin' thunder cats straight to your back, That's the way the thunder claps, yup And I'm a violent nigga you take this shit so soft - like you a violet nigga...(plz) You hustle coke? - you ain't got much shit to fall No one's buyin shit - like a Zeller's catalogue You fuckin up nigga - you ain't rock to caine Tsunami Time - 4 Shottie Lines, Wet you up like Blaine (in tha deep) I'm stackin up arms - ammunition to the clouds I ain't desperate, but crazy - A young fuckin Mahmoud |
first of all...
1. it has to be around 16 lines minimum...I dont know if cutting the lines in half like that works for the rules(we'll see) 2. u have to leave feed back on atleast 2 other peoplez shit and post the link in which u did it at. thats just so u dont get closed down. honestly...I liked it. its very dirty south. no lyrical shit. just simple I'll clap the shit out u type of real shit. but u do need to fix ur structure to make it more text presentable. check out the tutorials on this site to learn how to right a verse on net forum shits. I give ur verse... 4/10. keep that shit up dawg. |
didnt reallly like this. u always put 2 words that rhyme and call it a line when it aint. for real. u need to elevate and make something good cus u have potential but u aint letting it out. keep trying and shit.
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Moved to freestyle
Drop two links |
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