The Rap Game as it Stands...
 

There's too much confusion-in-the-game-
And alot of hate within its fame to start losing-its-name-/
You can write, until there's no more room-in-your-brain-
Then a fusion-of-strays come along and assume-it-was-gay-/
Without readin' it, the old playas come back and prove-it-today-
They read a tight verse and the rookies will do-it-again-/
They say "Dude it was lame!" but it wasn't that-bad-though-
Better than that-cat-yo, that's why his wack-ass-broke-/
It's like his shit stuck in Bob Hope I ain't seen crap-that-old-
It was funny as fuck that's why I laugh at these hoes/ (get it?)
Two emcees wouldn't have room for improvement*
....If one was wearin' god damn drag-back-clothes-/

what up I'm new here... feel free to post your honest opinions... not any of those one liner "what is that shit it was wack" posts I'm not up for that... if you wanna battle just let me know... peace

wut the fuck was that shit that shit was wack!
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you told me not to so i had to...but now that that is off of my chest...i liked this..sum places rhyme was offf alil but aside from that flow was nice and i could prolly write a few lines in responce..but thas juss cus i'm watching our culture fall apart as well...but thas juss one persons thoughts...nice drop..keep evolving..-shi-

I completely hated it(but hey thats just my opinion) it barely rhymed, vocab was simple, it was too short, very idiotic similes and metas, and no real message. <work on all of that and i'll be happy to give you good critizism, but for now i wont bother reviewing pure garbage.

-Damien-

his reply was half true...^^ but made himself look like a hater and just plain gay....but on another tip, he right, ya vocab an wordplay was simple...ya approach was nice but you could have elaborated on the rap game itself and been more succinct with it and come correct...ya dig


igido