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Lay-Text vs Black Queen
.::Battle Rules::. 30 Lines Maximum 5 Votes Wins No Crew No Hate No D/R No Recycling or Biting Topic: The Culture of Hip-Hop ~R~ Minimum posts to vote: 500 Check in by: 06-04-05 at 01:36 PM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. |
Black Queen has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-03-05 05:28 PM.
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Lay-Text has ACCEPTED this battle on 06-03-05 05:40 PM.
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vocal chords spit flames, deep words through profound lips bathe
a revolutionary sound fit & made of merry-go-round flipped plays about a sick plague, spoken free without mics, a sort of precision going back to old times, like anarchy, it wasnt born with a system s'like i reformed a tradition, of hip hop & writin through the years and if ya wonderin if god exists, be prepared, cause proof is here dont need a crew to fear, may not be the best- im the only one and i know you rappers spit fake, through plastic phony tongues so i'll unmask the puns, reveal the golden pen n pad on ma shelf still mad at myself, but the scriptures i hold a shit-bag of wealth im approachin to take it, a univeral motion to stake this i spit verses with jesus, then go play a game of poker with satan hopin to rake in- loot, and a holy sum of profit, see BQ gonna put on one hell of a show, n son, thats the prophecy your thoughts are weak, they wont phase my scheme your mind will get the seed of doubt, when i misplace ya dreams put my spirit in writing, and man its true, i plan to use wouldnt sell my soul now...only cuz i know what it can produce then i shown my work to da lord, but he was bored what i wrote fuck..i took a long path, now i'll stab myself with the fork in the road but before i had spoke, pureness did' i was shocked at the instance i felt all the light swept away, then sighted darkness in the distance i was thrwart n imprisoned, i fucked myself on a little promise now id sell my soul to lucifer, but not even he's bidding on it Guess it goes wit da topic goodluck |
In A World, Where Misguidance Is Often Confused With The Curious Minded.. People Who Don't Understand Truth From Reality, Ignorance Thats Blinded.. They Pretend To Comprehend Like They've Been In Those Situations Before.. Except When Fantasy Becomes Reality They're Outlined In Chalk On The Floor.. This Is The War Rappers Face In This World of Misunderstood Perpetual Lyrics.. From Those Who Described Their Life-Lines Through Their Intellectual Spirits.. The Evolution of Verbal Expression With Felt Passion Like Parental Aggression.. The Founders From Run DMC to Richard Pryor With Their Cultural Impressions.. In Present The Legacy Is Carried Forth From Mos Def To Talib Kweli and Nas.. So We Pause This Liberal Art In Its Tracks To Porportion Inspirational Stars.. Started As The Black-Mans Way To Protest In Forms Of Unknown Verbal Slurs.. But Eventaully Evolved Into A Nation-Wide Movement Where Controversy Occured.. Varieties Of Expressions Steming From Lifes Struggles To Police Brutality.. And Hip-Hop Hit An All Time Bottom When Gang-Banging Became It's Reality.. The Mentality of These Artists To Posion Our Youth With Death Increments.. To Hate One Another Because Of Color When Really..What Is The Diffrence.. That I Ask... So With These Past Incidents Leaving Our Communities In Vast Imprisionments.. What Kind of Future Does This Hold In Hand..Can You Suggest The Predicuments.. From Its' Fallen Soilder's and Leader's In This Movement of Hip-Hop Culture.. The Industry Feeds Off Us Until Our Death Like A Crew of Egyptian Vultures.. But Still With The Presence of Past Emcees We Progress With Our Rap Dreams.. Until The Industry Sufficates Us Into A Paralell Abyss Like The Black Sea.. To Make It Clearer I'll Polish and Present This Mirror Which Holds True.. That Only You Can Shape Your Destiny Some From Here Out Its All On You.. With That Said Please Take A Moment For You To Just Think..Ok Now Stop.. Now Help Progress Rap and Present Your Mind To The Culture of Hip-Hop.. ~R~ |
.::Uppin This Muphucka::. ~R~ |
This was feedback posted for Black Queen
nice...........feeling it. i liked tha scenery detail tha most, but i was also feeln yo imagination. strong consistent drop.
r-rated: u had a nice drop. strong vocab, good imagination. this one is close........ uppin for Livin' Legendz |
uppin nice drop Rated.............................
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Voted For: Lay-Text
Aii This IS what I Think Lay-Text Aii Man I Think That Your imagery was great in this topical all Though I Wasnt really feelin The topic LOL But Hey I wasnt battlin so I really cant say notihing about it basically you came and you dropped some deep feelings and emotions in this topical and You also hade a really good storyline and your didnt force your storyline with subtitles and stuff like that which shows that you are really good at what you do so Ima give you my vote in this battle .........Nice drop BQ Aii gurl You dropped good also except that I couldnt really follow your storyline all that to well No Offense your a great topical writer you have some great work bcuz ive seen it b4 but in this certain battle you didnt supply such a good storyline as usaul so I couldnt give you my vote this time so im sorry ........i jus wasnt feelin it this time RTF In Any Battle link in my SIg HONESTLY |
Voted For: Lay-Text
wow, lmfao, nice closer i was feelin the personal take... couple really effective bars n none that got me bored shit was nice to read, solid drop. you stayed on topic n did it well..nice drop . . BQ-, i liked alot of ya lines that stayed on topic n i feel if you had gone up against some1 that doesnt write as well as lay text in topicasl form you wouldve pulled away with the win but you had your verse stray away from the topic which was a huge disadvantage...try not to ramble on (middle verse) nontheless i liked your closer, it was a koo thought... |
Voted For: Lay-Text
Imagery: Both of you guys had amazing imagery to me... this was a really close battle... im goign to have to give the imagery to black queen... her piece just pained a picture in my mind more as the story progressed... Emotion: Once again a close catagory... Queen you had good emotion but it fell off in places while on the other hand Lay's was more put together and his was more felt then yours Structure: Bother had amazing structure so this is a tie Creativity: I liked the way that Lay worked his story on the topic and was just more creative with his story... Queen you had a good aproach aswell it just fell short Vote: Lay Text No hate to either of you both good talented writers and i would love to battle you guys some time |
Voted For: Lay-Text
v/lay text black queen has beutiful flow and vocab,the imagery was quite vivid, with some decent emotion,however it just seemed you werent that far on topic....i felt you could have done a better job with this,however dont get me wrong i think ytou are quite a good writer.....keep your head up laytext the emotion was strong in this piece you connected your words with the reality of hip hop nicely,the flow was decent, you had a more creative aproach to the topic,and i just felt you came more better and on a more real basis overall both great pieces and worth the read, however for the following reasons my vote goes to Lay-Text |
Uppin This Bitch Like A Curious Babysitter..
Hit This Up. ~R~ |
Voted For: Lay-Text
BQ- alright girl you did good for your first topical. Good balance of vocab. The emotion needs to be upp. The Imaginary of this verse was ok, still need to elevate on that, it was average not great nor weak. I say add some meta'z and put some feelings to it...but it's an ok drop. GOOD JOB. R-Rated. alright, this was a decent drop here. I like your imaginary and the approach you took in your verse. The emotion is what i was so eagar to look for. But there wasn't none. CONCLUSION= This battle to me is one-sided, i'mma vote for imaginary here. There was weak of emotion in both verse, elevate. BQ You had good imaginary but it was lacking details, i mean more details, your verse wasn't clearer. R-RATED you had a good verse man nice imaginary, i like your approach and you had more details in your imaginary so that's why I'm voting for you. 1 |
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