ArtforAce vs The Revelation
 

Battle Rules:

10 lines max
No Crew Votes
NO DICK RYDING
No Recycling
No Biting

Minimum posts to vote: 20

Check in by: 04-19-06 at 02:28 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

ArtforAce has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-16-06 02:42 PM.

The Revelation has ACCEPTED this battle on 04-16-06 05:48 PM.

You've got nothing on me bro your skill is invisible like dust,
If you are an artist, then someone please take away his brush.
Now what can I say, this dude is pathetic and he got pissed,
Cuz I said the truth? Well just like his skill, his site doesn't exist.
Kids a pansy, he backs out more than France call him a bitch.
I'll remix this kid, and still wouldn't the first on the artist list.
Throw him some critique and he'll reply with a temper fit,
The only thing you design is the herbs and the rest of your clique.
Now the game has spit you out and shredded you with cheese graters,
Cuz the only artists that fear you, are kindergarten fingerpainters.

Ever since i came to da site, dis cracka is tryna fight-
why dont u look at ur myspace, and see who is arright-
ur graphix suck foo, i killin u dead too-
ill come like a blood, and ill pop u outta da blu-
and hows your chink dude? he suckin ya dick too-
he wont even read our verses, and he go vote for u-
i aint come to dis site, to start no beef tho-
just these fagget ass niggas startin too ho mo-
dis site sucks, nigga and all ur rhymes is probably bit-
come to rapmusic.com, you're whole shitt will get slit-

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Voted For: The Revelation

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I'll start wit the losing Battla

Ever since i came to da site, dis cracka is tryna fight-
why dont u look at ur myspace, and see who is arright-
----no punch here tho i fink u tried, jus Bad line----

ur graphix suck foo, i killin u dead too-
ill come like a blood, and ill pop u outta da blu-
----horriBle setup line..first line suxx..sekond kinda koo--

and hows your chink dude? he suckin ya dick too-
he wont even read our verses, and he go vote for u-
--this aint no audio...u seem to Be writin fo one..Weak---

i aint come to dis site, to start no beef tho-
just these fagget ass niggas startin too ho mo-
----...stretcKhed rhyme...bad lines...----

dis site sucks, nigga and all ur rhymes is probably bit-
come to rapmusic.com, you're whole shitt will get slit-
---Ur on here..but your disrespektin and ur losin..hmm---

-OVERALL - - BAD VERSE NO cKONTENT NO PUNcKHES NO cKLEVER NO NUFFIN...-


Vote For The Revelation

You've got nothing on me bro your skill is invisible like dust,
If you are an artist, then someone please take away his brush.
---dust isn't invisiBle...secKond line suxkks...---


Now what can I say, this dude is pathetic and he got pissed,
Cuz I said the truth? Well just like his skill, his site doesn't exist.
-----old puncKh in secKond line...-----

Kids a pansy, he backs out more than France call him a bitch.
I'll remix this kid, and still wouldn't the first on the artist list.
---first nicKe lil summfin the first line is nyke..jus kinda komplex...takes whyle to get it ---

Throw him some critique and he'll reply with a temper fit,
The only thing you design is the herbs and the rest of your clique.
----.....not feelin AT ALL !!-----

Now the game has spit you out and shredded you with cheese graters,
Cuz the only artists that fear you, are kindergarten fingerpainters.
-----FINALLY A GOOD PUNcKH NICE cKLOSER akshually won u da battle-----

VOTE : THE REV
WHY?: His verse waz more battle geared more komplex more Better...he had one mo punch and he had a generally better writin pieke...

Both Stay Up

hollaatchagerrl
-Truth-

Aight, dust is invisible in the air. Or else you would freak out at what you are breathing in all the time.

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yeh its koo....

u wonn..........

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Voted For: The Revelation

well.. considering artforace's closer is about RM and I modded the battle league on there I guess I will be most suited to judge this battle and say that artofface has it backwards

no offense.

artofface just didnt have anything I felt. weal punches and just shit that didnt hit hard.

the revelation didnt come too great either, but his punches were in fact better, he had some decent shit and was more consistent, plus I like how he worded his shit more too. so yeaaaaa overall revelation got this

vote - The Revelation

RTF please
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So are you satisfied Art?..........................

Yeah^^

pretty much.........

you'll need to help me out

Voted For: The Revelation

vote goes to rev for having structure, and actually attempted punchlines...
but seriously...rev...the only half way decent line you had is the temper fit bar....
and the set up was kinda whack on that.....to sum up your verse....i'll start with the first line....and leave the rest alone

dust isn't invisible....

This was feedback posted for The Revelation
 

If i could vote revelation would get it, he had sum phat punchlines an Arts verse was to plain and basic