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.:The Diary Of -UNF-:.
Day 1
21 August 2005 13:25pm --------------------------------------------------------- *mental note-kill maddrapper...1* Man i need to go get sum lunch Satanic Chapters. Chapter.1 -------------------------------------- Murdered Holy Men ...I Spread Silence Thru Churches, Decimate Those Who Still Prayin Infinite Slaying, Body Rottin For Days, Flesh Slowly Decayin... ...Projectin Evil Thoughts Enforced By The Worlds Blasphamey Problems Smash Into Me, Saliva Drips From My Mouth As I Drift To Insanity.. ...Slowly In The Shadows, Jus Out Of Ya Presence I Stalk Ya With Turmendous Torture, Prayin For Your Own Death At The Alter... ...And Still I Assult Ya... Leavin Demons For Your Enitiy To Linger Wit Blades Spring To Hit, Slowly Puncture Yu Wit Needles Thru Ya Finger Tips... ...My Mind Projects Images Of Those Who Shall Feel The Slaughter Next Grasp Ya Lungs N Stop Ya Breath...Yu Rest Until The Next Day An Alter Boy Smells Rottin Flesh... ---------------------------------------------------------------------------- *Mental note-continue tommorow* |
Day 1
21st August 2005 14:06 ----------------------------------------- finished eating-go out n play b-ball soon First Freestyle of the day -------------------------------------------- Alphabet meh....................... bomb chronic leave glass pipes and bongs exploding, strong tonics leave trapped life until I speak my next-notion... dark matter leave materials imploding stem-potions, cause alter egos slightly nefarious that have slim-boasting... choke artist like inhaling the paint toxins on demo-tapes, stimulate while fakers immulate the future of grimmest-fate... integrate into systems while ripping fates-of-my-victims, watch em taking incisions leave em with breaking-decisions... Im with-wicked-logic Im spitting-talk-sick with explicit-content, have paper cuts like oragami fold when you twist-and-lock-it... then pivet-rocket bring back dead languages with crptic-topics, seisures leave you with livid-sockets displayed in vivid-optic... acid head scalps strippin-caustic speak no evil like lipless-gothics, like burning books Im ripping-topics making the timid-nautious... ya thoughts be cleaned-better like the strings of a dream-catcher, be like linchmobs looking for freddie end up with creamed-lecher... speaking-with-heat exposes hidden laws just the the secret-police, reaping-the-streets of ya killers that go for peeps-that-are-weak... Ill attach ya soul to a carriage to have you running-for-ya-life, the weak fall but the strong will keep coming-more-to-write... they'll be screaming-holy shit like I shoved a cross-up-ya-ass, Im seeming-boldly but ya shit will get tossed-in-the-trash alphabet alpha apostles assaulting assinine approaching aprehenda lasting lyrically longer living ligaments have lacking-lenders punching petty pitiful plans paralyzing paranoid prodiges hitting histerical hater hopping hazing hiatus horribly hot-mcs attacking avarice avid adversaries assuming they adequote basting bastards breaking bold befriending basic battlist exact edicate evaporating excessive extrogen-energy tearing terrible timely task taking text-trojans-timidly ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ Concept is played but fucka concept...rofl 1...... see ya tommorow! |
Good verse, the emotion was good. You made all your lines rhyme and flow well, which made it interesting and good to read.
...My Mind Projects Images Of Those Who Shall Feel The Slaughter Next Grasp Ya Lungs N Stop Ya Breath...Yu Rest Until The Next Day An Alter Boy Smells Rottin Flesh... Thought that line was the best, it showed good emotion and created a good image. Overall, it was good. |
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21st August 2005 15:54 ----------------------------------- Responding to feedback -------------------------------------- Hey Man Thanks For The Feed Upping... ------------------------------------------------------- *mental note-write more shit*...1 |
Good Shit Man Keep This Up Very Good Emotion And Imagery Story Line And multi's Great Vocabulary Was Great!
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21st August 2005 17:37 ------------------------------------------------- man im bored second freestyle of the day ------------------------------------------ Intro...The Girl goes to a party to impress a guy she hardly knows...lets go to the scene.. ...The Party... Tardy peeps poppin hearty bacardi and mixin it with Nine-Pills-Of-Ex-Tacy that'll send Spine-Chills-Thats-Plexed-Ya-See, deaths smilin while Lines-Kills-Her-Neck-To-Breathe Optics slammed-dim as her waists still dancin to spread the Poison-To-Da-Core a bitch Hoistened-On-Her-Fours, her face abused,eyes Moistened-Till-It-Pours Knocked equilibrium cuz da prequels-premium as her body Shifts-Her-Position and Rifts-Her-Cognition, her 'minds in da clouds' the way shit 'Swifts-Her-Ambitions' Visions wrecked in secs as a rapists darkly blessed- shes a Date-Rape-Victim her cries State-Scraped-Dictums unheard as the mans Hate-Taped-And-Gripped-Sins ----------------------------------------------------------------------------- *mental note-continue in a bit* *chek operation takeover forum* pz 1 ---------------------------------------------------------------------- |
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21st August 2005 15:41 ------------------------------------- respondin to feedback ------------------------------------ Hey Man Thanks For The Feed Upping... ----------------------------------------------------- pz ...........1 *mental note-do a collab wid yvonne* |
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21st August 2005 17:59 ----------------------------------------------- man im soooooooo fuckin bored second freestyle of the day continued --------------------------------------------------------- ...Afterwards...((Two Hours Later)) Rollin in a torn-caddie thats scorned-patchy bouncin on the Rocks-N-Gravel Doors Popped-From-Travel as the system blares, leavin peepes Shocked-N-Raveled Her eyes flutter half-open while she hears laughs-potent...her Memory-Lapsed in heresy tacts, her 'heart of stone softened' like her Emories-Cracked the driver pledged-in-sin as he pops more 'medicine' to help him 'Think-Straight' he can't Beat-Grace from the gods, to Plea-Base to 'space his heart' and 'Greet-Space' Parked at street-lights, vision fucked and he cant speak-right..but his Shoes-To-Da-Metal Bruised-N-Not-Settled, an innocent girl's 'droppin her fruit' like she 'Threw-Out-Da-Petals'!! ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- *Mental Note-finish later* *another mental note-up ma OM's* Pz....1 ---------------------------------------------------------------- |
good shit man all of em keep this going for reals!
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nice freestyling there -UNF-....very good work keep it up
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21st August 2005 18:14 ----------------------------------- Responding to feedback -------------------------------------- Hey Man Thanks For The Feed Upping... ------------------------------------------------------- |
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21st August 2005 18:15 ----------------------------------- Responding to feedback -------------------------------------- Hey Man Thanks For The Feed Upping... ------------------------------------------------------- |
danm this kid is hella good with hes open mics, and battles, i thought our collabo was hella good, ya other open mic was fire, ya battles its like u elevate depend how good ya battler is all around keep doing ya thing........
9.5/10 thats based on over-all skills point blank........ |
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21st August 2005 18:18 ----------------------------------- Responding to feedback -------------------------------------- Hey Man Thanks For The Feed Upping... ------------------------------------------------------- |
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